JonPatrickLee

Instead of saying “below low” maybe using “initial” would be better. At least it sounds better

This first chapter reminds me of the first chapter of My Three Wives are Beautiful Vampires

I thought it was 4 star??

I’ve read up to the paid chapters, and it’s honestly not bad. I would say it’s slow to start with, hard to truly hook a new reader to stick with the novel and pay for the rest of the chapters. It has potential but with only 4 chapters a week I’ll wait a year to stack the story

Guess I missed the part where it went back in time to high school. I reread but easy to miss the reminiscence

“Graduate high school”… in the first chapter he’s in college?

The writing quality isn't the worst I've seen but still could use improvements. The dialogue between some characters feels choppy, almost bullet point-esque. How the world works and the the layout of the economy/culture definitely could be touched upon more. And in the early chapters, a cliché scenario (parents die) happens but there's no real prior connection that we the readers have with them so it's bland, emotionless. It lacks impact. Good potential with plot but poorly executed.

If it was 2 gold a month, that would make the 15 gold more valuable. Otherwise that's just about 7 days of work

its mentioned that the egg is cracked and blackened. Which leads me to believe it burned in the fire along with his parents, so unviable.

Runs in the family I suppose