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    DaoistVHeuWf4 months ago
    Replied to Artemisix_01

    Yes

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    DaoistVHeuWf4 months ago
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    The work is good if you turn off your brain, the accelerated progression tag suggests that things would escalate very quickly, however, the character's level is simply absurd. Mastered the 5 elemental releases, eternal mangekyou, master in genjutsu, master in medic ninjutsu (second only to Tsunade), mastered sage mode, mastered the first hokage's mokuton scroll, all of Konoha's genjutsus were mastered. All this at just 8 years old. And for those curious about the protagonist's love interest, I'm sorry to inform you, non harem lovers, that the protagonist's big dream is to be a "king of the forest", with many trees and fragrant flowers. So far we have Tenten, Ino, Kurenai, Anko and possibly Tsunade and Shizune. This is my review after reading all the current chapters(66)

  • DaoistVHeuWf
    DaoistVHeuWfa year ago
    Replied to ErozothDraeor

    This is the first one I've seen that receives constructive criticism with hate and disgust, I hope you're not like that with the people around you. because that would make me feel sorry for them

  • DaoistVHeuWf
    DaoistVHeuWfa year ago
    Replied to DaoistvZHdIQ

    author-san don't let me dream, will mc's powers have something to do with raum?

  • DaoistVHeuWf
    DaoistVHeuWfa year ago
    Replied to Rubi_Stone

    you did? Amazing!!! Breaking taboos, breaking barriers, changing the cycle, mastering the world! INCREDIBLE!!!!

  • DaoistVHeuWf
    DaoistVHeuWfa year ago
    Replied to Rubi_Stone

    wow! You have great ideas and concepts!!! Why don't you write your own story following these supposed rules of how to make a good book?

  • DaoistVHeuWf
    DaoistVHeuWfa year ago
    Replied to Adamo_Amet

    I'm grateful to be able to help, the premise of the book is great, the characters are interesting, what really bothered me was how much the information was stretched out, this book could easily reach 4.9 stars if it were more dynamic. I'm glad I could help with your writing skills and that you didn't respond with the classic, "Uh. Your ideas are great! Why don't you write your own story with your own ideas?"

  • DaoistVHeuWf
    DaoistVHeuWfa year ago
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    the story is good, it would be better if the author hadn't dragged the story out so much, it takes about 17 chapters for the mc to transmigrate to the main world, which would be acceptable if the chapters had any use for the story, we have 3 whole chapters of it choosing your spells, something completely unnecessary. Seriously, the author thought it would be a great thing to have 3 entire chapters describing the possible skills that the mc could choose and only in the third part to show what the mc's choices are, everything could be summarized in a few chapters just showing which skills he could choose and showing the description of the skills he chose. There is nothing to say about the grammar, it is ok. the character development is good, it would be laughable if MC's development was shallow with so many chapters stretched out, showing his sarcastic and acid personality, but this doesn't justify the amount of chapters used for development, 27 chapters, but the story really starts to from chapter 7, with the transmigration only happening in the chapter 18. I would really like to enjoy the story, but if things continue like this he will only arrive in the city of Glória in the middle of chapter 50 and if he intends to follow the plot, in the ruins where nie li acquires the first page of the space book- time in chapter 100.

  • DaoistVHeuWf
    DaoistVHeuWfa year ago
    Replied to asaade

    How is it a repetition of the canon if in 17 chapters the author didn't leave the prologue?