Homeless_Traveler
Dear readers, Hello! I'm Homeless Traveler, a newcomer in creative writing!
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But the teacher said to exclude rune, incantation and magic circle?
This dialogue is a bit confusing...
They who?
Do you mean the former? The latter would be Cio
The author did an excellent job of narrating the story. The writing quality is also great, though some punctuation problems can be seen in some parts. Other than that, there's nothing else to nitpick. Keep going! (fire)
The first conflict was introduced quite slowly, and honestly, I thought this work would be boring. But I was wrong; the story is actually very good! Moreover, the writing was very neat. Looking forward to this story's completion!
I think you also need to put 'abusive content warning' at the start of this chapter
I wonder why the police didn't take the kids to psychologists...
This might be a wild idea, but I think a predator is scarier than a predictor...