Darkknite95

and I am done. Too many short, pointless chapters that don't go towards the MCs growth. The first year of his five years is coming to and end. so busy focusing on the "Voss" Sisters and apex losing focus of what Nico is here to do. Officially dropped.

more fluff chapters. Given the direction you are taking, this story focusing on side character development is moot. we want to read about Nico, the MC. this squabble between a family who really isn't even related by blood, who you have set the stamp holder as the mother don't care about the sisters.

a short chapter that again, while giving some movement, but not enough. Almost 9 months of his 60 months are gone, and what not even a quarter of the stamps needed. you need another fix in place or pock up the pace. over development of side characters distracts from the main story.

based on the description of the mine there is no physical way this creature would one fit and two be able to attack the way it us. a mine shift just isn't big enough. a nine foot plus tall being with a maul swing like described would be able to do so. something must be off with the description

more fluff. What did this chapter bring? Did it advance the story? 96 more stamps and only one detected in 4 chapters. I've said it once I'll say it again, fixed your pacing. Interest is dwindling.

the last two chapters have been fluff. unneeded and not moving the story forward. less fluff, more meat and potatoes.

pace is too slow. 98 women left to get through and focused, this much time trying to reel in a bit player in the plot to win one stamp. either the pace needs to pick up or the time frame of how long Nico has to live needs to increase. spent three months of 60.

It's not a bad story, but if you are looking at Nico having to get another 97 stanps after this one and the setup to even get it is taking this long, readers are going to lose interest.

the pace of him learning is too slow. I get drawing things out, but this pushes it.

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