Elona_Alone
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Elona_Alone1yrReplied to Autumn_01Dear . This is the mistakes you made . "I love you Jack" instead of "I love you Jack." Try reading that chapter again to understand what I'm saying
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It seemed you always forget to put full before the quotation ending
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Having a suspense at the end of each chapters is what I'm currently feeling . Unlike most novels you can easily guess how it's going to end just by reading the first chapter but this is different . I'm not sugarcoating this novel, but explaining how I felt . The characters development was wonderful, the plot twist is more than excellent. The only error I saw in this novel is that sometimes the author forget to put a quotation after the sentence of a person ended . Also the author sometimes use first person point of view in place of third person pov . Other than that this is a must read, and I didn't even think twice before adding this book to library . If you want a novel that would keep you to the hook, then this is it . Beside I don't praise novels but this novel have a great potential and if the author edit her errors this is in her book then it would be super cool đđ
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I must admit, this is getting more interesting . Definitely adding it to my Library đ
"You live under my roof, you follow my rules!! Bedelia watched her leave afterward as she slammed the door behind her. - Elona_Alone1yrCommented
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"Yeah, I do... he was laughing now while I shut my eyes to get some sleep, they're just like two opposite ends. - Elona_Alone1yrCommented
Aww đ„ș
"Jace!! Bedelia called and heard him laugh, Of course, he already knows why she had called him. And without saying any more word to him, he walked over to her bed and laid right next to me while placing his arms around her and gently cuddling her to sleep, finally she was somewhere safe. - Elona_Alone1yrCommented
He said
"She's going nowhere, Getty," I said interrupting them both - Elona_Alone1yrCommented
No quotation mark heređ
"I don't think it safe for her to stay at the orphanage anymore, she hurt a kid and I'm afraid of what she'll do next...who was talking to? - Elona_Alone1yrCommented
No quotation mark.
"Jace! Bedelia heard me call in seconds, he was the only person that could get her out of there, to save her from herself. - Elona_Alone1yrCommented
jeez
And when she finally got to look around, she found a drip attached to her wrist and a hang cuff at the other wrist. - Elona_Alone1yrCommentedCh 1 Chapter One
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you forgot to put this (") at the end of this statement
"How dare you hurt Jace! I yelled at him and watched him burst out into more tears which I didn't want and certainly wasn't interested in. - Elona_Alone1yrCommented
woah đ he really is terrified
" I'm...I'm sorry.. please.. I didn't mean to" He pleaded as his back reached and got stranded on the wall .The fear in his eyes sang loudly at me and I enjoyed every bit of it while frowning bitterly at him. Watching him shiver at my glare was something I dearly wanted. I looked down at his teary eyes and then down beneath his shaking body and saw as he had pissed his pants. - Elona_Alone1yrCommented
lol đ
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Mixed feelings đ„Č
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The novel was nice and it have an interesting pace but I think the writer need to do some editing. Paragraphs are too long making it hard to follow. The exclamation marks, apostrophe, full stop and some other things aren't in place. I advice that the writer use quillbot, Grammerly or perhaps a paraphrasing app on app store or playstore. It would help in the editing of the book since it needs a lot of editing. I see potential but I believe the writer can do more.
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Sometimes fairytales are realđ
 It sounded like a fairy tale when the shit became real. Yein stood up with all the broken bones in his body, like a movie trick but in real life then i yelled out to Yein saying... i cant be like you, you have courage and hope, why me im too scared to even try. Then we heard a loud roar from the monster. You little rat go on your knees, then i may not kill you but turn you to one of my slaves. - Elona_Alone1yrCommented
Too much exclamation mark
Kazuya that oath is what keeps me going every day, even when i know im ganna get beat up or when i may not have enything to eat for that day, that saying is what keeps me going. that saying is what makes me stronger and with that saying and with all the broken bones in my body i shall..."RIIIISSSSEEEEE!!!!!". - Elona_Alone1yrCommented
Yup. most friends this days are pest and it's becoming common in the world đđ
 So immediaty i called all the contacts i had on my phone. But to the shock of my life they all said the same thing which were"i do not want to be involed with you nor a demon"". What a shame at my path, people i called friends could'nt leave what they were doing to help save me, these werent friends they were pests just sapping me from the little i had. Then i realised that i had 1 contact left i hadnt called which was Yein, ow but Yein would'nt pick it , after all i've said,he would just ignore it. But i called him enyway. to my greatest supprise he picked the call,i was so shocked that i became dumbfounded for 2 whole minute. Then he said in a cool tone like we never had an argument