Apolonius556
I am an ambiguous writer, one day you may be reading about something, and the next day I come up with a completely different story than before. I hope you enjoy my stories.
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Why the hell do you post 20 chapters and then demand that if they want to read more they have to pay on patreon? --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
It was the first 30 episodes not the first 20, my mistake. Also after that, well you know what I think
Well, here is my review: The first 20 chapters were entertaining to read, the story had a good development, the mc's relationship with the other characters was well explained and understandable, and the story was well written. But (and this is where this story fell flat for me) when the canon characters showed up, that's when everything got screwed up. The super forced relationship that the mc tried to sell as Ron Wesley's mentor was pathetic to say the least, then as you noticed that he was getting to know the other characters it also seemed super forced to me. Why the hell would the mc have to teach Hermione a charm just to keep her out of trouble? The girl is 2 years younger than Mc, just tell her to leave and that's it. Another thing that bothered me a lot was how the third year arc lasted so long, when the first 2 years weren't like that. I understand that it was because of the whole thing about the philosopher's stone and so on, but it really wore me out on all that arc.
Absolutely nefarious here abandoned this story First of all the Mc is absolutely bland, in the second chapter with 3 YEARS he measures 2 meters and can already transform into his lycan form. Then he barely has a chance he goes with the Starks to follow him by "helping them" by giving him a bite. All this described in the most forced and rapid way as wanting to get it out of the way. Third he says he doesn't owe the Starks anything and then he goes and kisses their ass like a brothel whore. Honestly, this story is disappointing.
The story promises a lot at the beginning but as the chapters go by it becomes slow and boring, the domestic MC to a dragon for nothing because the few appearances he has with the dragon are few and absurd. The relationship with the characters is incredibly bland and I don't feel like the MC is important in the story other than winning some tournaments and being "a good gentleman". Without further ado, I was disappointed. ................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
Hi, thanks for the comment. What happens is that I use a translator to be able to respond to comments and reviews. I understand that it is annoying that the story is not in your native language. I'm so sorry, and thanks for trying.
Hello! Thanks for commenting, you see, what happens is that English is not my mother tongue, so I wouldn't know how to write the chapters well so that they look as good as possible. I always try that my works have the best possible quality. I do not rule out that it could happen in the future. But with this story it won't happen for now. I tried to do another story in English but like I said, I don't know how it turned out. Sorry for not being able to help you.
Hello! Thanks for the comment, I am aware that wizards belonging to the Black family use star names, which is why my character's middle name is Orion. I decided to put Dimitri as the first name to be able to give the character more originality and to be able to highlight him from other characters already read with this theme. Without further ado, I hope this detail doesn't lead you not to read this great story. Have a good day.
Hey, muchas gracias por el comentario, y me alegro mucho que te este gustando la historia. La verdad que me fasino las ideas que me has escrito y ten por seguro que voy a tomar algunas para poder seguir con la historia. Planeo que el fanfic tenga varios volumenes asi que quedate tranquilo que voy a tratar de implementar varias de tus ideas en la historia. Como dije antes muchas gracias por comentar, e interesarte en este proyecto que bueno, es un poco chiquito en el sentido que no muchas personas lo leen, pero estoy contento que por lo menos a alguien le este gustando.
Here the author making a self-criticism, I hope you like this story, as you can see it will be about romance and conflict that 2 extremely interesting people have to face. Damon Salvatore from The Vampire Diaries and Kate Denali from Twilight. The story will have short chapters, but there will be many, so I hope you like it. Any feedback is appreciated so that we can continue to improve. PS: Sorry if there are any typos or spelling errors, English is not my first language.
Well a review here, The MC is really tiring, the events in the story happen very fast, without giving context to what is happening. Things happen around the MC and he doesn't seem to care. The writing quality is understandable but not acceptable, as far as I'm concerned if you used an editor and proofreader it would be better. The characters around the MC are basic and without much consideration when it comes to developing in the story. I had faith in the story at the beginning but at one point they added things that didn't make sense and characters started appearing out of nowhere without context, as I said before. And finally, the powers of the MC, they paint it as OP at first and then it's not what happens. The truth a disappointment.
Well here is a review, quite acceptable writing quality, development of the story a bit rushed to my liking in terms of the MC's powers, but if you like OP characters it's quite good, the character design is not bad, but it seems a bit illogical and absurd to me that a baby no more than 2 or 3 years old has so much power, but hey, that's what the author wanted to say.