JR_989

it complimented

her eyes

He may be good with the spear, but may be lacking with the sword

The thought of "wanting to be friends" seems pretty unrealistic, going against her character setting...

bouquet not banquet

Love this book tremendously so far. The main character is charming and plays cunningly with his smooth facade. The developing romance is endearing and the introduction in this magical world is well-developed. Definitely one of the gems in Webnovel!

The story definitely has potential, but a proofreader is truly recommended. Right now it is a hassle to try reading this piece.

"Why are you wandering..." not the other way around

"does" singular-> plural "do/ don't"

add "s" to the singular use of verbs like "who respects"