
Writing
of reading
3090
Read books
HAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHHAA
I don't think Caelus knows this though obviously
Pfft...of course you can. Look to your (spiritual) predecessors
For the love of the game
No thank you. I would just like for you to revisit the grammar of your interactions, and then review the character's mannerisms again just in case, so that you can better improve your writing
The premise isn't bad...I think? But idk, it feels very AI-written to be in all honestly, and I feel like I read the similar kind of banter in each interaction between the MC and Maelle. Like I feel like I've seen the lines "This [insert adjective]" -> "It's not meant to be" OR perhaps "It's [insert adjective]" -> "It's [insert different adjective]"
Probably due to translation of phonetics and such
Definitely fell in quality with Kallen's intro