No problems

Yeah, took a bit of inspo from the raphtalia slave scene

What do you mean?

T-T

Edited, thanks for that:)

You

No problem

Also don’t forget that this is shortly after Elizabeth’s death, he just met a real friend, someone that made him laugh. Killing her is a gruesome task to carry out. And don’t mistake it, he was angry at her but he’d help her get away from the Faction after that he wouldn’t see her again. he didn’t forgive her.

Thanks for commenting but my MC isn’t a born killer, he understands the act he is carrying out. Killing someone isn’t an easy thing to do, he still has nightmares about Elizabeth’s death. While my MC is relatively smart, (mostly game sense) he didn’t just want to kill someone he knew that’s all, especially after he killed X.

First things first, your paraphraphs are too bulky. Cutting them down would help with fluidity and working on your punctuations will too

Wasn’t planning on :)

Yeahhh, if you have any questions be sure to ask.

T-T thank you kind citizen, your words have helped sooth my aching fingers.

Shameless Author here with a 5-star review. while I’m fully aware my book isn’t perfect. I still think there’s a myriad of pretty good qualities and I hope you all can see that too one day. The overarching and complete plot of the book has already been laid out but how I get there can still be influenced by the readers, With this book, I tried doing something different, creating a unique power system so each fight would feel intriguing and different it's hard to know if I succeeded at that so please be sure to drop a comment. I believe my characters are well written and well fleshed out, I’ll use some tropes here and there but I mostly want my characters to feel like humans you can see in the real world, with decisions anyone could get behind. But still, it's a novel hence exaggeration. I’ve always prided myself on writing good villains, so this will be another time to show it. The Hunting Dogs faction are the main villains of the book however there might be someone behind them, looming in the night like a red moon. My action scenes could be better and so could my dialogue so I hope I get better as you all read and maybe I’ll see a comment that says. “The author is actually improving.” And I’ll smile for the entire day. However, until then, I hope you have fun with this small creation of mine and hopefully one day it won't be so small anymore.

Thank you, :) This just instilled enough energy for ten more chapters.

Thank you, there should be a noticeable difference in the coming chapters

Yeah, that was a big part of what i tried to create. But I’m thinking about stopping it. What do you think?

Lets just say, 2022

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He was still being tied down to the balanc rule, the suffering must be equal to the wish