Oh😯, that explains a lot.

I enjoy the simple, straightforward style of this story. It's an easy read with steady pacing. It feels almost like watching a daytime drama with a full and diverse cast of characters. All with their own personalities, life issues, and backstory. Kudos to the author👍.

Vampires, magic, and a soul contract; a recipe for a great story! The reader is quickly drawn into the midst of the action as Freya's pact with Artium begins. The scenes are well captured, and the mystery of why she's being hunted makes you want to keep reading. Great work.

At the end of the paragraph: he was quite an experienced what? Vampire? Mage? Fighter?

Wow, this story is PACKED with drama. It starts off with tension and maintains this as it goes along. It has a lot of potential and just needs some polishing.

This story is intriguing right from chapter one. Both Acera and Sophie's characters are strongly depicted, and the tension surrounding their circumstances keeps you reading. This is a great start.

This is a story filled with strong emotions. The metaphors are beautiful, and it has some truly thought-provoking lines. It's evident the main character is very self-reflective. I think readers can also use this to evaluate some aspects of their own thoughts on life.

Who said this?

The opening of chapter one really hooks you; I was immediately interested. I also like how the characters' backgrounds and motives are clearly painted. This work has great potential. Continue to write and polish it!

How did he demonstrate? Pinching his fingers together?

The writing style is simple, and the environment is well described, evoking a sense of quaintness. The main character, Gala, seems very sweet and likable so far. I'm not sure what the story world is like yet since it's just two chapters in, but I think this is a good start.

The story moves along at a fast pace, and the characters and dialogue are very engaging. It could use a bit of proofreading, but overall the writing is great.

A comfortable spot? Position?

"...understand," the little girl said. Or you can keep the current structure and capitalize the "the."

The

In later paragraphs you write "Daenerys." Is the apostrophe here a mistake?

The story is well-paced and the writing is wonderful. It's engagingly descriptive, the POVs of the MCs vividly painted. You can tell the author has put a lot of thought into this work. Very well done ☺️.

Beautifully said.

I notice you switch between past and present tense a lot in your writing. Watch out for this. But so far so good 👍.