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Man, I loved your story outside of the norm and everything and fuck other people's opinions. but I think you are losing the potential of the systems, the shadow system, you use it as you should, but the proficiency system, the ability to absorb knowledge from books and let's not forget the farm, I don't remember if you took the universal machine or not, great for research. and also if I remember correctly there was a metal vein generator that should have been available by now. This was the criticism of the systems that I think can be better used now let's talk about the characters the MC is fine the way it is, it's just that he misses some things that he shouldn't because he has a perfect memory and he keeps talking about oclumency and how Well, now the MC wives, I think they should have more importance and remember all of them, there are several who never appeared again like Hermione or Dafhine, even Fluer disappeared so I think it could be more fun that way. Well, I don't know if you read this review, I tried to be constructive because I see that you don't post this novel anymore, but if you read it and continue, I'd love to keep reading and congratulations, a great job for a first story. In case it's full of grammatical errors, this isn't my mother tongue and I'm terrible at English, Uncle Google is helping.

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