Randomfish113

Was the library used often or not? Double negation says that it's used often, context indicates that it's not.

Ditch one of the selling...

part to path?

Instance -> insistance

"empire dogs", empirical means something else.

She did conceal her strength though?

How exactly does "tall and straight" breast look? For me that translates into "long and saggy"?

your're -> your

stair -> stare?

I've read all the free chapters, but I'll stop there. It's an ok story, but I have a hard time reading it due to the rather poor writing. Quite a few grammatical errors, the sentence building is problematic and the text doesn't flow and/or come together (for me at least). I have to say that the quality of writing increases a bit as the story goes on, but not enough for me to spend money on it. The story itself might be worth a read, if you can stand the writing.