DarthPrince

Just why? I mean writing a note is for communication. The entire point is defeated if the other party can’t understand your note. What’s the point of this dumb thing?

I think the easy and most obvious solution would just for him to have been born three years earlier. Why does he need to be the exact age as the cast? All you need to do is replace the words three and four year old with six and seven respectively. Honestly, I’m kind of mentally already doing that cause every time you bring up that he is still three years old, this amazing story becomes slightly worse for me.

The authors translated books are usually really good but this one is just not for me. Like take the paranormal activity box office thing. Yes it earned around 200 million in OTL but that was in 2007. The system artificially boosting it to over 500 million in 1992 is a little too far fetched. The novel till now is essentially just an extended version of the first two chapters. I get that there are only so many decent Hollywood fics but maybe reconsider choosing this one.

Around 1992, weren’t Warner and Fox the only ones backed by a media group?

Thanks for the chapter. I get you’re just translating the fic but maybe you could make some changes in the chapter. The reasons he provided for Hiruzen not being suitable are just conjecture at this point. Tobirama who is so sure of Hiruzen that he entrusted his brothers village to him should not be convinced by mere possibility. After all at this point from Tobirama’s perspective, there is an equally likely possibility that Hiruzen could be a great hokage. Instead, why don’t you use the recent event of the Raikage being betrayed to convince him? This betrayal proves that the Hokage needs to have the at least support of both the Uchiha and Senju clans or be strong enough not to need it. Since Hiruzen cannot hope to achieve the heights of the first two hokage, his position still always be unsteady as he is not from the two founding clans. Thus to prevent any internal power struggle it is best for him not to be hokage. Also in ch 6, please remove tobirama calling Kagami his brother like that in public. I just can’t picture the ever serious tobirama talking like that in front of the village leadership. Anyway, looking forward to reading more of this.

I read till the Ch 12 and the fic is great so far. Also you should add the Naruto tag. Just a few points: - In the warring states, it makes no sense for clan members to harm their own genius clan members so why was the mc hiding his awakened bloodline. I am not saying that the division of resources via a flexible caste system is bad. It's actually a great addition. Just the mc should be taking full advantage of the clan. When there are so many external threats, I do not believe clans can afford to eliminate or hinder even one of their prospects. - I get that you're trying make Otagakure but sound based justu do not need to be so prominent. It's the land of Rice paddies not Land of sound and logically speaking, everyone in the land having sound power may make some of them less effective in combat, thus incentivising them to move to another land which maximises their advantage. Also since sound is not one of the five elements, sound based ninjutsu like sound blade sound be limited to kekkai genkai. Maybe reduce it to three major clans having sound based powers and the other two having a different kekkai genkai like steel release or crystal release. I am looking forward to reading more of this fic.

That’s a fanfic I would read. Dropping this.

The decision to not take up the private school offer is so stupid for both the MC and the author. For the author, using the private school should have been an amazing opportunity to justify so many changes like the inclusion of Leonard and Howard and truly make this story his own. All he gained by using these dumbass decisions is some minor comic relief or rivalry fight rubbish tropes to advance the story. Moreover, this is not how the established character should logically behave. Honestly, the only reason Im actually writing this is because I still have some hope. So please author stop and take a look back. Is this how you actually wanted your story to turn out... just another mediocre fanfic using common tropes for the sake of chapters? Maybe consider editing the previous chapters and take this fanfic in a new direction.

I get that this final doesn’t really matter. What I am saying is that even this worthless final should be worth more than helping a random old lady. Him being late is actually great as that helps his future team realise just how valuable he is. My main contention with this is that when you tell us that he choose to do this knowing he was going to be late and miss more of a football game than he always was, you tell us that he values this random act more than his team and football which is inconsistent with the character you have developed. Overall, I realise this is too much thought over a simple joke. However, this is one of the better modern family fanfics and I am looking forward to see how his character develops.

Tftc. Enjoying the story so far. Though the part about helping the old lady was not a good addition. To reach the top of anything, you can’t be this pure naive good guy. It added a comedic element but it felt very out of character for the mc to potentially miss the finals of a game he has dedicated his life to just to aid an old lady.