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  • moonmirror
    moonmirror8mth
    Replied to Hyperman

    Yes, each form of his has a different personality. Also, the reason he's revealing his technique is because of a Binding Vow.

    Ch 18 Clash 2
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  • moonmirror
    moonmirror8mth
    Replied to THII_EXTERNAL

    That sounds pretty cool, but unfortunately he already got his Cursed Technique. :(

    (A/N: I'm still not sure on what Cursed Technique should I give to Takashi, so if you have one on your mind, do share it if you want to)
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  • moonmirror
    moonmirror8mth
    Replied to Anonny_Anonymous

    It's not a slave system though? When exactly did the system force him to open the academy? There's no punishment or anything for failing a task, and the MC is also not forced to make an academy. He could've just decided to go on his days while just ignoring the tasks, and get no punishment in return. Did you even read the novel?

    Ch 4 Cursed Spirits and a Neighbor
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  • moonmirror
    moonmirror8mth
    Replied to Fkhri_Maulana

    Lay down on your bed, relax your muscles, and close your eyes. 🙏

    Ch 16 Hachioji
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  • moonmirror
    moonmirror8mth
    Replied to Tobi_ntr_king

    Yeah, he's definitely at the top of the verse strength-wise. He was just a bit unlucky to face two of the strongest characters.

    [Task: Recruit the Special Grade Cursed Spirit, Jogo, and make him acknowledge you in a battle!]
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  • moonmirror
    moonmirror8mth
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    Alright, let's start with the pacing. The pacing is generally well-handled, providing enough details to keep the readers engaged without overwhelming them with excessive information.The interaction between Ian and Alaric is a central focus, highlighting their connection and Alaric's concern for Ian's well-being. I like the sibling relationship between them.However, there are many instances where the prose could be refined to enhance readability and flow. Some parts of the dialogue feel a bit repetitive or overly verbose, which might slow down the pacing.Trimming down the dialogue while retaining the essence of the characters' thoughts and emotions could help maintain a smoother rhythm.Here's some improvements the author could implement: 1. The Claritiy of Descriptions: Some parts of the description, especially during the action scenes, will benefit from a clearer portrayal of the surroundings and character movements. This will help readers visualize the scenes more effectively.2. Balancing the Pacing: The story shifts between intense action and quieter moments. Make sure the transitions between these moments are smooth and the pacing remains balanced to maintain the reader's engagement.3. Show vs Tell: In many instances throughout the novel, the narrator tells the reader about the character's emotions or reactions. In my opinion, it would be better to show these through their actions, thoughts, and dialogues.4. Dialogue Tags: Please avoid overusing phrases like "said", "asked", "mumbled" etc.5. Details: Details are very important, for example, you could include sensory detalis like smell, sounds and textures.Overall, the novel has great potential. The update stability is good, and I hope the author will maintain it. Regarding the writing quality, it's good, however, if the scenes were more detailed I'd give it 5 stars.

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  • moonmirror
    moonmirror8mth
    Posted

    Alright, let's start with the pacing. The pacing is generally well-handled, providing enough details to keep the readers engaged without overwhelming them with excessive information.The interaction between Ian and Alaric is a central focus, highlighting their connection and Alaric's concern for Ian's well-being. I like the sibling relationship between them.However, there are many instances where the prose could be refined to enhance readability and flow.Some parts of the dialogue feel a bit repetitive or overly verbose, which might slow down the pacing.Trimming down the dialogue while retaining the essence of the characters' thoughts and emotions could help maintain a smoother rhythm.Here's some improvements the author could implement: 1. The Claritiy of Descriptions: Some parts of the description, especially during the action scenes, will benefit from a clearer portrayal of the surroundings and character movements. This will help readers visualize the scenes more effectively.2. Balancing the Pacing: The story shifts between intense action and quieter moments. Make sure the transitions between these moments are smooth and the pacing remains balanced to maintain the reader's engagement.3. Show vs Tell: In many instances throughout the novel, the narrator tells the reader about the character's emotions or reactions. In my opinion, it would be better to show these through their actions, thoughts, and dialogues.4. Dialogue Tags: Please avoid overusing phrases like "said", "asked", "mumbled" etc.5. Details: Details are very important, for example, you could include sensory detalis like smell, sounds and textures.Overall, this novel has a lot of potential for further development. The update stability is good, and I hope the author will maintain it. Regarding the writing quality, if there would be more details describing the scene, I would give it a 5 star.

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  • moonmirror
    moonmirror9mth
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    This is the closest thing I got.

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  • moonmirror
    moonmirror9mth
    Replied to Hanni_Baal

    Taming and also silencing their negative emotions to a degree.

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  • moonmirror
    moonmirror9mth
    Replied to Hyperman

    Haha, he's not nearly as strong as Jogo yet.

    Ch 7 Shop
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  • moonmirror
    moonmirror9mth
    Replied to SwordGod007

    No, you're probably talking about what Geto said to Jogo.

    Takashi's eyes widened as a new task appeared before him. He wasn't very confident in completing this task, after all, Jogo was very prideful, and he hated humans. If that wasn't enough, he's also immensely powerful, to the point where he was acknowledged by a fifteen fingers Sukuna.
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  • moonmirror
    moonmirror9mth
    Replied to MkGod

    There are cooldowns.

    Ch 10 Reward
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  • moonmirror
    moonmirror9mth
    Replied to MkGod

    There, fixed it.

    He extended his arm, and a small orb of fire began to appear on the tip of his finger. Takashi marveled at the small orb of fire dancing on his fingertip. It glowed with an intense heat, yet he felt a sense of control and harmony as he manipulated the flames with ease.
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  • moonmirror
    moonmirror9mth
    Replied to DaoistK7bhej

    You're right, thanks.

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  • moonmirror
    moonmirror9mth
    Replied to Renegade_Lemur

    Thank you. Also, thank you for your review, however, it seems like it was deleted by Webnovel because you put the word 'k*ll' in it.

    Ch 9 Alliance
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  • moonmirror
    moonmirror9mth
    Replied to KRDarkKiva

    I will definitely use this, thank you.

    We finally reached this point, I'm very excited. Also, what do you guys think I should do with the Shop function? At first, I was planning to have only items related to the academy in it, but let me know what do you think.
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  • moonmirror
    moonmirror9mth
    Replied to Renegade_Lemur

    Thank you. :)

    Ch 7 Shop
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  • moonmirror
    moonmirror9mth
    Replied to Bakuboy

    In my opinion, it would cost around six hundred million yen.

    [Playful Cloud: A duplicate of the Special Grade Cursed Tool, a three-section staff. Its strength relies on the user's raw power.]
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  • moonmirror
    moonmirror9mth
    Replied to Drunken_Sleeper

    I really like this one, but I wanted something that's unique and not a combination of two techniques. Thank you.

    (A/N: I'm still not sure on what Cursed Technique should I give to Takashi, so if you have one on your mind, do share it if you want to)
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  • moonmirror
    moonmirror9mth
    Replied to Kurooof

    Thank you, I took inspiration from this.

    (A/N: I'm still not sure on what Cursed Technique should I give to Takashi, so if you have one on your mind, do share it if you want to)
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