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LordEggar

LordEggar

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Writing is my dysfunctional marriage

2021-11-12 JoinedNew Zealand
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  • LordEggar
    LordEggar28d
    Commented

    facts

    CHAPTER 1: Life is not fair!
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    A Path To Becoming The Strongest Player
    Fantasy · Roo77
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  • LordEggar
    LordEggar2yr
    Replied to Trunere

    Of course of course

    Ch 1 Insolence
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    Amadeus Returns
    Fantasy · LordEggar
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  • LordEggar
    LordEggar2yr
    Posted

    Eeeeh, I'll be honest, the grammatical errors and broken English make it hard for me to read through. I've only got as far as the first chapter, but I think that if the author was to work on their technical writing ability it could be a lot better. Would love to see what it could be if it was reworked or if the author had a more literate editor to aid them.

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    An Ordinary Traveler Who Meets Every One Extraordinary
    Fantasy · Mist_Vinona
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  • LordEggar
    LordEggar2yr
    Replied to zero777

    Hahaha

    Ch 1 Painful Parallels
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    Tharix: Tale of an Orphaned Mage
    Fantasy · LordEggar
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  • LordEggar
    LordEggar2yr
    Replied to MrFalan

    Romance? 100% Adult content? I'm unsure. If it moves in that direction I'll definitely include that, otherwise I might end up doing some bonus chapters instead :$ Discord is on its way! Won't be long until I've got that set up. Thanks for the support :D

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    Tharix: Tale of an Orphaned Mage
    Fantasy · LordEggar
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  • LordEggar
    LordEggar2yr
    Replied to LoudAssSheep

    Thank you! I'm glad to see the change of pace paid off. Perhaps she will return. I wonder how Mikey would fare dealing with her if she did return as an antagonist 🤔

    Ch 7 Witch Water Grove
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    Tharix: Tale of an Orphaned Mage
    Fantasy · LordEggar
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  • LordEggar
    LordEggar2yr
    Replied to LoudAssSheep

    You've no clue how much motivation this high praise gives me! It's awesome to have you aboard the journey :D

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    Tharix: Tale of an Orphaned Mage
    Fantasy · LordEggar
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  • LordEggar
    LordEggar2yr
    Replied to TolstoyTsar

    Wow! Thank you so much!

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    Tharix: Tale of an Orphaned Mage
    Fantasy · LordEggar
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  • LordEggar
    LordEggar2yr
    Posted

    Quite intelligently written and a joy to read. I like how the MC is very self-aware and he drives the progression of the plot quite nicely. Great work from the author!

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    Dropped...sh
    Eastern · Black_Lotus99
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  • LordEggar
    LordEggar2yr
    Posted

    Really enjoying the pace so far. Unquestionably easy read, which makes it easier to read casually or when you're out. I'm a big fan of underdog stories too, so I love how Killian's written - as well as what his future will look like!

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    Novel Moved: Search: Became the Broken third son
    LGBT+ · Rain_Corn
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  • LordEggar
    LordEggar2yr
    Commented

    Enjoying the pacing so far, it's an easy and enjoyable read!

    Ch 1 Chapter 01: The Beginning after the End
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    Novel Moved: Search: Became the Broken third son
    LGBT+ · Rain_Corn
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  • LordEggar
    LordEggar2yr
    Commented

    Cutie

    A small tabby cat was out in the rain and had started to follow him on the sidewalk.
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    Novel Moved: Search: Became the Broken third son
    LGBT+ · Rain_Corn
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  • LordEggar
    LordEggar2yr
    Posted

    Have enjoyed the first few chapters of this novel so far! It is a little description heavy and could use some more summarisation in places, but the flow of the chapters takes a good pace. I personally cracked up at how tragic the MC has had it so far, rather entertaining. Keep it up author!

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    The Scientists Way of Cultivation
    Fantasy · Killershellfish
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  • LordEggar
    LordEggar2yr
    Commented

    KABOOOM

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    The Scientists Way of Cultivation
    Fantasy · Killershellfish
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  • LordEggar
    LordEggar2yr
    Posted

    The technical ability of the author is outstanding. Vivid and clear descriptions that weren't too lengthy allowed for a fresh flow through the chapters without losing momentum. For me personally, the subject matter is not so much to my tastes - but it's pretty hard to deny the creative talent regardless of said tastes. If you're reading this review, this novel is undoubtedly worth a try.

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    Abhorrence
    Fantasy · Arathes
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  • LordEggar
    LordEggar2yr
    Commented

    Sheesh!

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    Abhorrence
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  • LordEggar
    LordEggar2yr
    Posted

    I'm definitely a fan of the pace. It's very much straight to the action, though the characters show through. I think there are more than a few grammatical mistakes, but nothing that can't be read through. I enjoyed the two chapters, hopefully more is to come soon!

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  • LordEggar
    LordEggar2yr
    Posted

    Absolutely fell in love with the first chapter. It's a great hook and your writing style is quite beautiful. The progression through both chapters was quite nice, though I think I'd liked to have one or two chapters between the first chapter and the next sighting of the monster, mainly because I wanted to get to know the main characters a bit more first. I also think, though the description is beautiful, it might work better if you broke up your paragraphs up a bit more. This is mainly because it can be a bit of an effort to read in succession. Otherwise I've got no real gripe or criticism, I'm really excited to read more.

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    Eldritch Bleak
    Horror · Eldritch_Umbra
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  • LordEggar
    LordEggar2yr
    Posted

    I'm really excited for what's to come! Though it's not been too many chapters, the author seems to have a clear undertsanding and confidence in not only their characters, but also the established lore behind them. This really shows through the progression of each chapter. I would personally prefer there be some more unique names to each chapter rather than a part 1 through 6, mainly due to the ability a chapter title has to set the tone early on - but that's a very minor detail. There's a lot of potential with this novel! Great things are to come!

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    God Of The Horde
    Fantasy · Demonic_Kaiser
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