LordEggar
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Eeeeh, I'll be honest, the grammatical errors and broken English make it hard for me to read through. I've only got as far as the first chapter, but I think that if the author was to work on their technical writing ability it could be a lot better. Would love to see what it could be if it was reworked or if the author had a more literate editor to aid them.
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The technical ability of the author is outstanding. Vivid and clear descriptions that weren't too lengthy allowed for a fresh flow through the chapters without losing momentum. For me personally, the subject matter is not so much to my tastes - but it's pretty hard to deny the creative talent regardless of said tastes. If you're reading this review, this novel is undoubtedly worth a try.
I'm definitely a fan of the pace. It's very much straight to the action, though the characters show through. I think there are more than a few grammatical mistakes, but nothing that can't be read through. I enjoyed the two chapters, hopefully more is to come soon!
Absolutely fell in love with the first chapter. It's a great hook and your writing style is quite beautiful. The progression through both chapters was quite nice, though I think I'd liked to have one or two chapters between the first chapter and the next sighting of the monster, mainly because I wanted to get to know the main characters a bit more first. I also think, though the description is beautiful, it might work better if you broke up your paragraphs up a bit more. This is mainly because it can be a bit of an effort to read in succession. Otherwise I've got no real gripe or criticism, I'm really excited to read more.
I'm really excited for what's to come! Though it's not been too many chapters, the author seems to have a clear undertsanding and confidence in not only their characters, but also the established lore behind them. This really shows through the progression of each chapter. I would personally prefer there be some more unique names to each chapter rather than a part 1 through 6, mainly due to the ability a chapter title has to set the tone early on - but that's a very minor detail. There's a lot of potential with this novel! Great things are to come!