first of all you have a nice writing style. I enjoy the way you describe the scenes and characters. The story is also interesting and your character design is good. Overall it a good novel. Keep up the good work 👍

Interesting writing style with mystery and humor. The descriptions are nice and the story is progressing smoothly. Good work there and hope your book does well.

cool. this just reminds me my MC's avatar customization.👌

Interesting start for the novel but the execution is a bit confusing. Just review the pacing and mistakes while space out the paragraphs. Overall the characters and descriptions seems good. Keep improving and it will become a good story.

Interesting story. The dialogs and descriptions are smooth and entertaining. The mc and others characters look believable. Good work there.

This novel has a interesting and intriguing story. The descriptions are also good and the characters seems alive but the passing can be a little confusing. Overall it is an interesting novel to read.

This novel is interesting. The descriptions are good and sounds beautiful and the mc personality is understandable. The story so far is entertaining so I'm hoping it continues like this.

The synopsis is simple and understandable. As for the chapters I think you should add a title to give an int about what will happen. The story is interesting and the MC is smart. For the writing, I think you could give more details like characters appearance and thoughts and also use some gaps to indicate the passing and change of location. Overall it is good and I look forward to the rest .

First thing, the synopsis is too long and give too much information. However the chapters themselves are good. I really like the way you describe the events that are happening. It make the passing more fluid. If I have to add something, it would be to use some sfx to enhance the tension and mood. Good work for now and I hope you continue to write the story and improve.

I only read 2 chapters but the story is interesting. The characters are believable and feet their environment. Also although the MC was already an experience gamer, his personality is still good and seeing him learning new things is entertaining. Apart for some words who seemed to be repetitive and some long paragraphs, the writing is good. I already add to library and hope you will do well.👍

What a coincidence. I have a MC name Takami Daichi🤣