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KuMiShi

KuMiShi

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Nothing except English is not my mother tongue and that I'm quite good at it. Or so I thought haha...

2021-10-31 JoinedFrance
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  • KuMiShi
    KuMiShi1yr
    Replied to Purple_Khaos

    Amazing review! Just be aware to not rush your chapters, think of the satisfaction it provides you and your readers (I guess) to read well-written chapters. I'll try your book when I have time to spare ;)

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    The Arcadia System
    Fantasy · Purple_Khaos
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  • KuMiShi
    KuMiShi1yr
    Replied to Tampan_Berani

    No problem :)

    Ch 1 The Beginning of the Story
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    Genix
    Sci-fi · Tampan_Berani
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  • KuMiShi
    KuMiShi1yr
    Commented

    The prologue is interesting in itself but the writing quality is poor. You should make more space between sentences so that we don't get massive paragraph to read (think of phone readers too). Also, you should inform yourself about basic writing skills like the difference between Showing and Telling so that you know when both are efficient (which wasn't the case in your first chapter). It is the first chapter so I'm not going to make a review but I hope that you'll improve while writing. Good luck for your work author (I'm sadly going to stop here)

    Ch 1 The Beginning of the Story
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    Genix
    Sci-fi · Tampan_Berani
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  • KuMiShi
    KuMiShi1yr
    Replied to SIENDONIA

    I agree with you, the author should probably learn a few writing skills to improve those chapters (which is totally possible for an author)

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    Harem in the Sole World: Maiden Infringement Play (Old)
    Sci-fi · Demigod_of_All
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  • KuMiShi
    KuMiShi1yr
    Posted

    This book is not a book, nor a novel, nor a fanfic or any of those amazing work you can find on webnovel but I mean, it is still good to check it from time to time when I feel like posting things. :(

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    My Little Prompt
    Fantasy · KuMiShi
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  • KuMiShi
    KuMiShi1yr
    Commented

    Not going to lie : I was scared as f

    Ch 1 Update [IMPORTANT]
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    [Z]
    Fantasy · CasualNaphu
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  • KuMiShi
    KuMiShi2yr
    Posted

    [SPOILER FREE] I've read the only 16 available chapters at the moment but I can surely say that this novel is a good one, like among the best you can find on Webnovel. The writing quality is good and I learned many words enriching my vocabulary. I hope it won't deters some readers. The stability of updates is correct according to Webnovel's standards. The pace of the story is mastered here, not too fast, nor too slow so it is cool in the end. As for character design and world background, they are satisfying enough to get you hook on the story chapter after chapter but my only complain is that on some chapter the author do a bit too much exposition which could be felt as reading an essay, so be careful author. Anyway, give it a try readers you may like it as much as I do

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    [Z]
    Fantasy · CasualNaphu
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  • KuMiShi
    KuMiShi2yr
    Replied to dottore

    I checked just to be sure and it appears that you are right but as a French person, I just don't understand the logic. However, I appreciate your reply because I will use it for future works so thanks.

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    Grand Magus: Reincarnated with the Engineer Element
    Fantasy · Kurai_Takahashi
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  • KuMiShi
    KuMiShi2yr
    Posted

    This is the first review I write and this is also the first review you are going to get but I will not mince my words. Writing Quality: The writing quality isn't bad but I do not understand AT ALL why the author puts commas at the end of each dialogue. Moreover, in chapter 4, the author put an additional note (AD) at the end of the chapter mentioning a notation that is relevant for comprehension of the chapter, that's illogic. I will also add that you won't found high IQ decisions as mentioned in the tags because, again, in chapter 4, we learn that he cannot understand his new family but yet know his sister's name and the fact that he has 2 other brothers ( The author really need to read what he wrote before publishing it, he will avoid disappointment from readers like myself ). Moreover, your notes are breaking immersion, use them carefully( addressing the author ). Stability of Updates: I don't care but judging by the length of each chapter, I'll assume that the story is updated frequently, so this is good for the audience. Story Development: Honestly, the pace is too fast in the prologue but after that it slows a bit so I won't say more. Character Design: I don't think the author cared enough about his/her characters because, as I said earlier, the pace in the prologue is too fast creating a replaceable protagonist as well as forgettable minor characters like Randy. This guy literally dies few paragraphs after introducing it. It isn't bad but you can find better in terms of character design. World Background: The magic system is quite usual but yet detailed so there is nothing to complain about. However, I think that the first chapter lack environmental detail like what kind of world the boy is living in for example. Note to Author: Your work isn't bad but you seriously need to master some writing skills and actually read what you wrote to get a global idea of the final work. I recommend to you this youtube channel where you can found everything you need to work on to improve yourself : Diane Callahan. To conclude, I won't add this novel to my library because I didn't get attached the protagonist.

    altalt
    Grand Magus: Reincarnated with the Engineer Element
    Fantasy · Kurai_Takahashi
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  • KuMiShi
    KuMiShi2yr
    Commented

    What about his sister though 🤔

    "Do not touch me!" Riley screamed, his eyes reflecting the ball of fire that was hovering on Scarlet Mage's left palm, "No one is allowed to touch me!"
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    Villain Retirement
    Urban · Romeru
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