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SmilesS

SmilesS

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Just a writer trying their thing.

2021-10-27 JoinedUnited States
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  • SmilesS
    SmilesS1yr
    Posted

    I think this has some nice potential. Doesn't waste any time trying to pull you in. Gives a very mysterious vibe in how the initial buildup goes. I see alot of potential in this book the more I read through it

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    LoL World
    Fantasy · JH_Ayon
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  • SmilesS
    SmilesS1yr
    Posted

    Stands out amongst alot of generic and dis-interesting tower or fantasy web-novels due to it's beginning and focus on being "dark". Most of the story flows well is neatly spaced and is easy to read. Avoids "rushing" the introduction. Only issues in between sentences are words that don't need to be there, or are unnecessarily "bulking" it and minor grammatical errors. World is relatively fresh given how early at the time this review is (Chapter 7) but hoping it will not devolve into generic tower replica. Novel has alot of potential to do well, just needs more frequent updates besides what was already said.

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    My Yearn
    Fantasy · Elixer_Yuu
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  • SmilesS
    SmilesS1yr
    Posted

    Novel has potential, but author struggles with grammar, pacing and proper usage of tenses at the time of writing. Paragraphs are very stuck together, many run on sentences or words inserted without a clear flow into them. Protagonist's mental thoughts and emotions at times come off as scattered and not as easy to follow, or the wrong word is being used to describe them. Can be a 5/5 if formatting + wording and tenses are cleaned up, along with more careful touches upon the protagonist and characters themselves.

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    His only sunshine
    Fantasy · Lonewolf21
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  • SmilesS
    SmilesS1yr
    Replied to ChadGuy45_

    Xing's mother suffered for a long time

    Miss Wenghu smiled, she would finally see the suffering of the brat on live television. She hugged Sun Yaozu so happily.
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    Cultivator Battle Royale
    Fantasy · SmilesS
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  • SmilesS
    SmilesS1yr
    Commented

    Man this guy could sleep at the speed of sound next.

    The next second, he instantly woke up!
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    Future News: My Phone Mutated
    Urban · Mirage
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  • SmilesS
    SmilesS1yr
    Commented

    The same question the reader has

    "Future News? What on earth is this?"
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    Future News: My Phone Mutated
    Urban · Mirage
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  • SmilesS
    SmilesS1yr
    Posted

    Shameless Author self review time This is a satirical parody of most cultivation novels. Watch as our protagonist, Xing Wenghu hallucinates an entire past life! And uses his bizarre, unusual and totally not stolen from Manhua he read techniques to fight other idiots. I hope this story at-least gives you a chuckle.

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    Cultivator Battle Royale
    Fantasy · SmilesS
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  • SmilesS
    SmilesS1yr
    Commented

    uh oh stinky

    Everything now depended on Seong Jin-Woo's decision.
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    Solo Leveling(Only I Level Up)
    Urban · 추공 (Chugong)
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  • SmilesS
    SmilesS1yr
    Replied to ChadGuy45_

    Oh don't worry he won't die. But let's just say. Something "special" is gonna happen

    "I don't know who this is, but I have a bad feeling about this one!"
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    Cultivator Battle Royale
    Fantasy · SmilesS
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  • SmilesS
    SmilesS1yr
    Posted

    A nice story, I hope it will contain many face slappings in it's future. The part that killed me was CH4 when Lin Zhang's father pissed on the bed. Just the way it came out so blatantly lol holy shit. Eager to see where this goes.

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    Tsk! I am your Grandfather
    Fantasy · CosmosGalaxZ
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  • SmilesS
    SmilesS1yr
    Posted

    It's rather dark, but I like that. You make it stand out with it's dark humor, sad moments and how it flips in between. Overall I think this has alot of potential. Very gritty, and not in a bad way.

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    Masquerade of Madness
    Horror · ThePotatoKing
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  • SmilesS
    SmilesS1yr
    Posted

    A nice read. I enjoyed how easy it was to follow along, things are written well and there is never a dull moment in the dialogue. Very promising, and I'm sure you will go far as you update further!

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    The Blood Hound Of House Grey
    Fantasy · Littleplotter
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  • SmilesS
    SmilesS1yr
    Posted

    I enjoyed the casual characterization through description, the way you established brevity and tension quickly and smoothly at the same time. A rather good show all in all. I have a hard time believing this is your first novel in fact lol.

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    To Burn a Kingdom
    Fantasy · Aeirana
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  • SmilesS
    SmilesS1yr
    Posted

    The Writing was quite a treat. I enjoyed the luxury of the succinct descriptions and very vivid usage of scenery to depict a rather intense image to the reader. Something you don't often find while browsing webnovels is that large "description". The authors smooth writing and transitioning from there only serve to make a comfortable reading experience. I would recommend this novel to anyone really.

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    deleted book12
    History · NotBeatrix
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  • SmilesS
    SmilesS1yr
    Replied to Dieudonner_17

    Glad you like it so far. I'm not planning on introducing a harem or anything don't worry.

    Ch 7 Savage World (2)
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    Rise of the Volcanic Warrior
    Fantasy · SmilesS
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