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SmilesS

SmilesS

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Just a writer trying their thing.

2021-10-27 JoinedUnited States
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  • SmilesS
    SmilesS4 years ago
    Posted

    I think this has some nice potential. Doesn't waste any time trying to pull you in. Gives a very mysterious vibe in how the initial buildup goes. I see alot of potential in this book the more I read through it

  • SmilesS
    SmilesS4 years ago
    Posted

    Stands out amongst alot of generic and dis-interesting tower or fantasy web-novels due to it's beginning and focus on being "dark". Most of the story flows well is neatly spaced and is easy to read. Avoids "rushing" the introduction. Only issues in between sentences are words that don't need to be there, or are unnecessarily "bulking" it and minor grammatical errors. World is relatively fresh given how early at the time this review is (Chapter 7) but hoping it will not devolve into generic tower replica. Novel has alot of potential to do well, just needs more frequent updates besides what was already said.

  • SmilesS
    SmilesS4 years ago
    Posted

    Novel has potential, but author struggles with grammar, pacing and proper usage of tenses at the time of writing. Paragraphs are very stuck together, many run on sentences or words inserted without a clear flow into them. Protagonist's mental thoughts and emotions at times come off as scattered and not as easy to follow, or the wrong word is being used to describe them. Can be a 5/5 if formatting + wording and tenses are cleaned up, along with more careful touches upon the protagonist and characters themselves.

  • SmilesS
    SmilesS4 years ago
    Replied to ChadGuy45_

    Xing's mother suffered for a long time

    This chapter has been deleted.
  • SmilesS
    SmilesS4 years ago
    Commented

    Man this guy could sleep at the speed of sound next.

  • SmilesS
    SmilesS4 years ago
    Commented

    The same question the reader has

  • SmilesS
    SmilesS4 years ago
    Posted

    Shameless Author self review time This is a satirical parody of most cultivation novels. Watch as our protagonist, Xing Wenghu hallucinates an entire past life! And uses his bizarre, unusual and totally not stolen from Manhua he read techniques to fight other idiots. I hope this story at-least gives you a chuckle.

  • SmilesS
    SmilesS4 years ago
    Replied to ChadGuy45_

    Oh don't worry he won't die. But let's just say. Something "special" is gonna happen

    This chapter has been deleted.
  • SmilesS
    SmilesS4 years ago
    Posted

    A nice story, I hope it will contain many face slappings in it's future. The part that killed me was CH4 when Lin Zhang's father pissed on the bed. Just the way it came out so blatantly lol holy shit. Eager to see where this goes.