Props to the autor for revising the chapters gramar. The writing was bad, then average and now its good. The plot seem original and more or less a fast read 10-15 min per chapter. A really good novel. I hope that you dont quit writing, becuz this have a great potential.

The story seems promissing but dam i saw a lot of gramatical errors. Some lines even feel like they are missing words. To be fair the ideia is 8/10 but with the current writing 4/10. Ill change my score for more if the corrections are made but rn its overall 5.5/10 I expect at least correct gramar from native english writers.