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"Nanomachines, son. They harden in response to physical trauma." - Senator Armstrong
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What's up with these massive separations between the paragraphs? I can safely say that most people aren't reading for the length of the chapters, they're reading to find out what happens next in Tom's journey.
I'm pretty confused on why you'd want to delete this story, but it's none of my business.
Probably his mom from when he was a vampire.
Which would go against your argument of being indifferent to everything when you have enough power. But at this point, we're just grasping at straws, so I'll take the initiative to end it here.
Power doesn't make you more indifferent or more kind. It just brings out who you are; when you're above the consequences, of your actions, in this case due to having power, then what's stopping you from showing who you really are? Whether that be through kindness, or indifference.
Chances are she let herself get captured. It'd be a lot harder to find someone you're looking for, when you've just wiped out an entire pantheon worth of Gods.
Yeah. AI is a crutch that only hurts you in the long run. It's best to make mistakes early on to improve, rather than have to make those same mistakes later on, when expectations are higher.
I'm gonna be completely honest, it feels like AI was used to write this chapter. There's such a major difference in the vocabulary, grammar, dialogue, etc. from the previous chapters.
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He did. Like three paragraphs ago.
I'm gonna be completely honest. This story fell off badly. It had such a good pace in the beginning and actually kept me intrigued, but then the plot just started going off the rails. It started speeding up to such a degree that there weren't even full-on arcs, rather just summaries of what happened. Especially this ending, at first I legit just thought this was the future Micah's timeline, not the fucking end of the story. You really have to start working on making actual endings for your story. An ending is not just a summary of what happened after the main events. It should be impactful and wrap up loose ends. Overall, I'd give story a 5.5/10. Do better.
Just want to add onto my point, but divine dividing requires the user to physically touch the thing they want to divide in half. Boosted gear has no such weakness, quite literally allowing the user to just speed blitz the divine dividing user. It's a high risk high reward sort of thing for divine dividing users, which is why it doesn't need a nerf.
Sure, you make a valid point. But look at it this way: With boosted gear pre nerf, you could quite literally become God with a capital G. It was quite literally just a matter of boosting enough times. Let's say you have a stat point of 10 in all stats. That's the average stat point. Now let's say that gods, dragons, etc. Are all in the millions range. It only takes you 17 boosts to reach the level of those beings while being a completely average human. If you want to read a power fantasy story where the main character gets an omnipotent cheat without flaws, you came to the wrong place. Hae a good one.
There's a massive difference between dividing something in half and the 2x boost being multiplicative. Dividing something in half is not nearly as impressive as the 2x boost being multiplicative and, as such, wouldn't need a massive nerf.