I'll try again later today, and again, dialog was interesting, but there was so much that it felt like the focus of the story. cheers.

Finally! Someone finally wrote it. Atomic level control is just too exciting.

No exploration of why Zixin is having such difficulty with qi?

I think it's the best version anyway, sounds the most pleasant.

Wtf is this reviewers account?

Wyvern are too cool to be judged the way they are. How are western dragons above wyvern?

He might not have the time. I'd imagine it's nice to get feedback on his work with what he's able to write.

A pleasure.

creating conflict?* not sure what this is.

Coveting the reward.*

A pleasure.

+3

A pleasure.

Good title.

Awww, just let it happen man.

I think all abilities and skills should start on a new line, its easier to read and more pleasant on the eyes.

Adventuer rank here doesn't seem to flow well, some other fancy term might suit this better, as it stands now, I see the adventurer association themselves as garbage. Even Hero rank sounds slightly better.

Black and white. I like this very much.

A pleasure.

I'll kill Lucas if nobody else wants to. I don't mind.