Some_creative_name

I agree. It's why im rewriting it for the umpteenth time and making sure I actually like it before putting it out again.

I never make reviews, but this fic makes me feel some type of way. the idea and concept are amazing, but the problem is the MC. Not because they are edgy or saving anyone but because they are basically a background character. From chapters 25 to 34, they weren't even in the story and were just a retelling of the anime with some slight changes. Now, if the chapters were longer, it would be completely fine, but each chapter barely feels like two thousand words, and I easily glide through them. There are also a lot of grammatical issues, such as the constant repeating of the same word or the sentences not making sense. though grammar can be fixed with time, and i hope it does. I obviously dont expect perfection since it's a fanfic, but you can't have the MC be a background character and have such short chapters at the same time.

how is this even on here

I know this comment was a while ago but I thought Falco liked kiwi

yeah and that's because I feel as though the Navi have a lot to offer but there wasn't much to do when I should have probably made it two chapters

that actually would have been a better idea

it's a fan design

fair enough