Doctor_Blue
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Doctor_Blue11hReplied to MrIIIo😂😂😂👍🏽
'Damn, Earth's products suck. The best item would be the classic millennial ginseng?! TF? Did Earth have cultivators? Eh, thoughts for another time.' With a confused expression, I closed the Shop and Opened the Gacha.- Doctor_Blue2dCommented
garp what are you doing there??😂😂😂
"Gah!" Zeus reacted as if physically struck. "Forget what was just said! I command it! As King of the Gods!" - Doctor_Blue2dReplied to leeroycgnaCh 142 Prefecture Tournament (2)
- Doctor_Blue2dCommentedCh 19 Lyra's POV : The Chase
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- Doctor_Blue7dCommentedCh 5 Trouble comes knocking
- Doctor_Blue7dCommentedCh 2 Prologue-2
- Doctor_Blue7dReplied to Master_Cheater
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Author's note : The names of the two characters are reversed to fit the One piece world. You know like Monkey D. Luffy instead of Luffy D. Monkey. I'll leave a picture of the two characters our main characters are based on in the paragraph comment for this - Doctor_Blue8dPosted
Overall star point- 4.6 I gave 1-star less to story development and character design; others got full stars– writing got reluctant 5-star. Now the reasons: Let's start with character design- Mikail(MC) is an interesting character– which could have developed into an amazing character, if he was more emotionally developed; considering the length of the story. How that could have been– many ways; best example would be, him being shown to have better interaction with his parents, especially when he asked for a seamless character assimilation to the 'Angel being' at the beginning of the story; I would agree, that starting chapters had good interaction with his family and even his childhood friend Rose and her family. But, it got kind of sabotaged, starting from vol2. Well, he at least had an amazing synergy and emotional attachment with his Pokémon at the start and even until the latest chapter. Again, ever since his first journey, when he was a child with natu and caterpie by his side– I don't know why, but Author started a bad trend of ending volumes with a inadvisable rush. Now, this includes story development, simultaneously. When he was still in Rota he had half become a plot point, well, kind of– most of his interaction were very bland by the mid vol of Rota and although, there were different reactions to his actions and shown via differing povs, slowly, they too were cut short or directly eliminated; again, why, I don't understand, as Author has already stated quite a time that this a slowest burning story and a journey– hence, why not show everything? Then, we have a false start or ... A distracted start of a harem– which is by all means an inadvisable decision, once again. Although, this is my personal opinion, but, think about it– an established legend in this story, Dr Oak, he married one woman lived happily with her for so long and even when she died, he still didn't remarry. Plus there were no such indications given throughout the story that our MC is dumb lust full asshole; why show the girls throwing themselves at him then? It has already killed their somewhat budding personalities and it will get worse... There might be more reasons for 1 less star– I can only remember so many, right now. Now, the best parts of this story: Number one- Our Godqueen Mothra💕✨😁 Number two- Again, this is my personal interpretation of the story, so far– the brotherly bond of Horus and Mikail and how they are two elders of one big family. Number three- Not the last– Author is active and really nice to readers; he will reply back to most, if not all the queries you might have. And honestly, personal opinion again, this is one of the biggest thing that is keeping this story so active and its budding community. Thank you for the story Author-san. All the best 🤠👍🏽
- Doctor_Blue9dCommented
author san, on a side not– will the mc always use commands out loud like now or will he be using just like in his student championship?
Combining that with Frank's reaction I swiftly concluded that his Pelipper had to have Drizzle as its ability which countered Igneel's Drought and vice versa, which explained why Frank had frowned since he had expected it to rain. Knowing that Pelliper could also have Rain Dish if it had decent enough potential, I was quite happy with this ability stalemate, even if it meant that Igneel would not get the full boost from his Solar Boost+ talent since he would still receive a decent boost as long as the sun up in the sky was not covered. - Doctor_Blue10dReplied to Azrail93
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Talents: Scale Control, Sand Control*' - Doctor_Blue10dReplied to Azrail93
uhh... no the one who got drought or something 😅
Talents: Scale Control, Sand Control*' - Doctor_Blue10dReplied to Azrail93
hmm, I thought he had discarded the practice 😅
I knew that she was not suggesting the use of Pokmeon because most Pokemon that could help in this situation were too big and them taking action might cause a commotion. We had to be as fast and silent as possible to avoid attracting the attention of the lookouts outside, so they were a no-go. - Doctor_Blue10dReplied to Azrail93
oh, alrighty~
There it was, the first blessing bestowed by a legendary to one of our family members. While this was definitely a boon, so something good, it was also undeniable proof that we had attracted the attention of one of the legendaries. Hence my momentary disbelief and "immediate" tactical retreat.