The story is good, but it was forced

The story is good and to some extent addictive, but the problem is that the character doesn't have his own story line, he only trains to be able to help the main plot, and he forgets to do it. The things themselves. I recommend reading Ass:. hollowmonk

I really like template fanfics, but not everything is rosy.The story is good, up to a point. The story is so fast that it seems like it is written without any interest. Ass:. Hollowmonk

The story is very good, and very dynamic. There are some things that leave something to be desired, but it's a matter of preference from reader to reader. I recommend! Ass:. Hollowmonk

Good up to a point. If it were to be so connected to the plot I would watch the original. Undeveloped character, with a wide range of development, many things unexplored. Ass:. Hollowmonk

And that. A constructive criticism, for me, as I love fanfics, it is essential that the character has his own story, not so dependent on the original plot. Ass:. Hollowmonk

I went to chapter 30, expecting more. I really liked the dynamics and the shape of the character, his free form and having his own story, so far I don't have much to complain about. I just hope that it continues to follow this same premise, remains free and without being tied to the original plot, the avatar and its trio. Ass:. Hollowmonk

I went to chapter 19, the story is good and has a future for its audience. I prefer free characters, who despite being linked to the main plot, also follow their own story. I believe that because of the many points of view, it was a bit of a hindrance. Because that's what a fanfic is, an out-of-the-ordinary character in an already existing plot. But I don't take away from your story, it's very good. Rich in information and feelings. Good luck. Ass:. Hollowmonk

Are you just going to transcribe the original story?

More, I need more! You can't make me anxious like that!

O começo foi clichê!

Boa

É muito bom

Gosto bastante da história, portanto que o MC não seja estúpido, não pague pau pra mulher, e não tenha comédia extrema. Eu vou ler!

Boa

Boa

Boa

Lendo*

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