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Life is fair but human makes it unfair
Bro what are doing you are writing the same thing repeatedly again and again
Arthur I have a few questions please answer 1) why are you using battle energy instead of qi or mama.? 2) why is MC is dumb when using the system !? 3) why is MC is not taking full advantage of system ?? 4)why is MC is not selling the skills he got from the ring to system ??? 5) will MC stay this bumb the whole novel or get any better !???
with F why are you being goody two shoes ?!!! it's disgusting
Bro too little exp
bro spelling mistake in 2nd line
bro how to pronounce this. please give easy name for system
bro use this symbol for system<>
stupid
bro story is going in more predictable way and i can guess what will happen.and your Concept is good, and may be one of the best I have ever read but your over praising and too predictable story line is making it sloppy and boring.and if there's too many female around mc it will feel boring and non-existing. like if you introduce a female character we will know she is on of mcs.
brother you have a great concept for story but your overly praising for even to a smallest things making the story boring and overshadowing the concept
i think shadow heart or black heart that produces unlimited mana or qi will be better then this skill