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why ruin a decent story with the worst fight scene in history? where did Jon's strength go? his magic? how come Valarian steel can all of a sudden only find gaps in armor instead of cutting through steel like paper in every other fanfiction and the actual book material? Jon's sword should cut right though Robert's hammers and right though his armor.
Kaia is way to hyped up. Why would Amon trust her at all because someone told her to teach to pay back a favor and he doesn't even know the person in question or their motives or Kaia's motives for that matter. Why is he so trusting especially if he's in control of his emotions it doesn't make sense. one more thing why is the whole group so accepting and trusting Mabel so much they went on a mission with her once met her 3 times and known her for a week but they act like bff's right away and protect her with their lives
the story started off good but around ch 75 the story just stops and switches to an entirely different story with no connection I don't understand all the story just stopped along with the language it doesn't come together at all and totally lost me and my interest I felt like I got robbed in the middle really wtf