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I swear, I got a paper tomorrow afternoon but couldn't resist not reading😂😅

Edit some things and improve it, would make the book better I believe . All the best in your writing journey. I may try the book again later probably to see if things may change

Anyways, this is a bit of a rant, so prepare yourself. It did feel like that, though. The love thing, literally look at Lalyn, always blushing and behaving like a pure tsundere, and you tell me that they are not behaving like that? Look at Amlria seducing him to sleep with her continuously, like what, bro. Also, when I say cringe like, for example, that chapter where he was going to the guild with Amoria and then they were stopped by one hoodlum like that, couldn't he or Amoria just release a but of killing intent or couldn't she just release a burst of power and be done with it. Like, for what reason do we have to waste a whole chapter over a non- necessary fight, and also, the style of fighting was worse. You are angry, so you show intimidation, cos in my opinion it might have been better if you made him let the man feel fear than fight with class cos that class fight was literally cringe. It would have been a different story if you did it well, though. It was basically rile up the man and then beat him up, like WTH. Though that whole chapter shouldn't be necessary in these wives of Magus started behaving like their power level and stopped fearing the dukes and what not cos as the hero's party members they must be far stronger than almlst everyone in the kingdom, if they behave like their power level unnecessary things can be excluded which can make the novel better honestly that fight is what disappointed me, it wasn't necessary. Also that Van Hellix's son thing is also another thing to tick me of wrongly. I thought it was a little play with Amoria, but then it blows out of proportion, and now everyone starts calling him Van Hellix's son, then he has to be interacting with kids like a kid himself and be dealing with their drama and what not, honestly it was also annoying. Also, I didn't say you didn't put in effort, but it's the fact that at the beginning, it was able to hold the reader's attention but as the story went on it became a slow slice of life which I don't have an issue reading but the cringe events and sometimes interactions just gets you so annoyed it was frustrating. Earlier, it wasn't so. So, work on the events and interactions it might help you more if you capture certain things a different way. Also, why does he always behave so submissively with them, especially Amoria, I mean, they are close friends, not lovers, so why is it that at every turn, they seem to mellow him down when he talks, can't he just say a firm no and be done with it like the way he was to his best friend after leaving the party, seriously it was manageable at first but that just became frustrating to read later when. it continued through till where I stopped. Remember, they are friends, not lovers pls.

The book wasn't bad but I still wasn't seeing improvements in the story line. There was no main focus to group d the story and it just started getting annoying past chapter 40 I think, can't remember which chapter exactly. From that point the conversations and the events that too place were extremely cringe and annoying to read, also most importantly the mystery of how ppl who were in love with his members love him all of a sudden makes no sense. Even if the skill of his friend is taken into account at best they should see him as a close friend not love him. Yet the author forces some love frkm nowhere which makes no sense to me and has still not been explained, the book is just fuzzy overall with no clear path or signs on anything really, it started well but it gets bad the more you read, and that is sad considering I was enjoying the book at the start, well guess this is the end of my journey on this book

Yeah I call 🧢🧢

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I don't get this, though author. How is he saying the naked body with skin if he is looking at the internal body workings, and I don't believe he will be turned on if he is looking at the internal body to fight no matter how big the assets are or how sexy she looks when she fights with her breathing style

You are one goddamn evil and sensible author, savage😂😂

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😂, damn. I love your story telling author, seriously don't give up on this book it's been so long since Iast had a refreshing new read on this platform which didn't feel like smth I have read already or could predict. I'm a student it won't be easy to support you and unlock chapters when you go paid but i will do well to try, really enjoying your book fr