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Melongirl32yrCommentedCh 43 Let me Out!- Melongirl32yrCommentedCh 40 Unknown
- Melongirl32yrCommentedCh 20 Bonus Chapter: The Goodbye Letter
- Melongirl32yrCommentedCh 36 Suspicious Person
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Woah, so many theyâs in one paragraph O.o
They were at a gas station looking for food that they could use. They were low after having been on the road for a while and they didn't want to run out while they were leaving the city. They had gathered a generous amount of supplies when they heard a loud crash in the distance. They finished storing their supplies and ran outside to see what the commotion was. When they got outside they looked towards the edge of the city where a few skyscrapers were located. On the top of the 2nd tallest skyscraper was a pair of Griffins ripping apart the building, most likely fighting someone, they were quite a ways away but since the griffins were in between them and the city's outskirts. They knew that they would have to fight the two griffins. - Melongirl32yrCommented
Child of Love huh
[You can call me Aiko.] - Melongirl32yrCommented
Not gonna show nudity-esque stuff HERE
Over time they saw his hair getting longer and darker while his limbs seem to be getting slightly shorter. When Mason flipped over to face his parents they noticed that the area around his chest was getting more pronounced(he was wearing clothes, not gonna show nudity-esque stuff here.) They also noticed blue accents on the end of his now longer hair that reached his hips but that wasn't going to do much to distract them. - Melongirl32yrCommented
Ah found the british :D
"Could you bring over the minced garlic jar in the fridge? After that the biscuits will be ready." said Mrs. Kondark while stirring around the pasta in the pot. - Melongirl32yrCommented
Why? It is two cute girls hugging O.o
Touched by her words, Miyata also returned the hug with another which lasted for a few seconds. A few men also directed dagger like stares to Miyata but she gave it no thought and continued anyways. - Melongirl32yrCommented
Thank you for the chapter! I think this could be the perfect opportunity to describe the people who Jess is playing with and against. I cannot imagine anyone besides Jess, her partner and the 2 cousins. Also all of them are probably gonna be her classmates from now on, so thats that.
Ch 35 A Little More - Melongirl32yrCommented
Can you describe the other team? I mean they got the first place, how do they look to Jess?
First place went to the other team that had a person who wasn't tired. That much is obvious saying that they have the advantage. Sure, my team had one person in good condition, but I got stabbed so that isn't necessarily true anymore. - Melongirl32yrCommentedCh 34 Put on a Show
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With hard work and dedication to one goal you can reach any height ^-^ Your writing got better, but it still feels a bit too rushed oftentimes. Iâd try to flesh out the characters, since if you are writing from different perspectives itâs gonna be especially important :0 Thanks for the chapter though =)
This chapter has been deleted. - Melongirl32yrCommented
Reread this novel again (I think that I have read it on RoyalRoad), itâs sad that you didnât continue. Honestly, I hope that Ofris and Rika were a really cute pairing, I personally donât mind the age gap. Somehow shifting their relationship into a father/daughter one made it weird for me personally. Anyways, I hope that you continue writing this story, but even if not, best of luck to you and a big virtual hug ^-^
Ch 82 A Much Needed Talk