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Honestly it was a little disappointing, I mean it was the author's choice that the mc basically in the first conversation with SHIED said that he came from another dimension and was gifted by someone with his capabilities, it just doesn't make sense for the author to have a careful personality base, that the mc cares about his identity, and the next moment he's telling SHIED that he came from another dimension, and let's not even talk about the mc accepting SHIED's shit, come on man they tried to hack his system twice , they drugged you and tried to steal the omnitrix, do something, I'm not talking about killing others but react like a person who had their life threatened for nothing
In addition to what I consider to be common errors in this genre (lack of depth in character personality in general, rushed events in a short period of time) I think what most disappoints is that it's not really kingdom building, I mean the MC just leaves out there dominating territories and plays into the hands of his "subjects" to administer, there is no type of discussion about choosing territory for construction, economic and food problems faced. Basically another "Lord of People" with op mc without any depth in general
kinda early for SHIELD to get involved
Usually when the MC is mutant, I prefer separatist movements, I mean look at the comics I don't even need to talk about the possibilities. I like the way the MC wants to go, I think he should develop a cure for mutants who have extreme physical mutations or powers that negatively impact their lives, of course he should store the data of these "undesirable" powers for future use. Also the mutants have around 14+ (if I'm not mistaken) Omega level mutants, so the author has plenty of space to showcase new mutants in the unexplored countries in the comics.
It gave the impression that you just wanted to rush the story, so you made this death totally idiotic, I mean I know you want to go to the new world soon but come on, better not put characters if you're just going to develop them that way. I don't know why I'm writing this, the way you responded to the comments on the last chapter, it's obvious that you don't care what readers say even if it's constructive criticism.