I mean... they tried? The world building and abilities are okay at best, but the rest is... The characters are shallow and the storyline is too boring to read unless you Really want to. The writing does get better, the ugly [brackets] disappear after some time, and the dialogue in generel gets better but still, this reads like some emo pre-teen weeb dream. I honestly dont know what else to say, except i hope the author has evolved from this and it was just the beginning/ a stepping stone in their career.

I like it

Thx for the chapter

Definitely some good stuff

Good start

I think there are a few things lost to translation, but other than that its not too bad