There's somethin called plan b ain't that big of a deal

My main and really only complaint here is how little Niggross shows Ori doing nothing in combat. whenever Ori is fighting in a group he gets little to no cool moments in feels like he's just being carried by Six, Max, and Rebecca like it doesn't make sense for him to be the leader of the group first of all and it doesn't make sense he's part of the group at all not to mention that his choice of weapons is poor, he's described to no be a muscle head yet he uses an lmg I think that an overwatch revolver or unity would be more suited to him, all in all I hope that the author researches actual cyberpunk game builds and choses the cold blooded gunslinger build for him which I believe would be the most practical build for how Ori is described and gives him more badass moment like shooting a guy between the eyes from 50ft away and other cool moments

Thanks for the chap

The MC, Is bad like really bad there is absolutely no reason for him to be the MC. He's not a strategist, he's not a sly profiteer, he's not charismatic. He's just a normal dude. That might sound good but no, It's really not because every time there's a problem he doesn't have the foggiest idea on how to fix it and walks around like a moron asking everyone how to fix it. When your going to write a novel from someone's perspective the novel will get boring if the MC is boring or stupid or just generally way less competent than his advisors at everything he's not good at anything. I understand not wanting your MC to be a garysue but making him boring with nothing he's good at is not the answer to a garysue, this novel would be a 5/5 for me if the MC was special in anyway, everything but the mc is done exemplary well the author clearly took his time to create this world and it shows but the MC for me takes it down to a three.....................................

Overall the narration is ok could use some work but the dialogue is where you need to focus right now, it sounds un-natural and flows weirdly like for instance above when introducing dexter's party you could of done "How are you doing" instead of what's going on this would make it more sensible when dexter replies "We're doing just fine" also use more slang like "what're you doing"

But not everyone is a soldier, most are day to day farmers and half of the population by medieval standards are not it to be soldiers, also there are children to young to be soldiers and those to unfit

It's a roller coaster or a dumpster fire you can't stop watching good because it's so bad

'Sorry Link I don't give credit come back when your a little hm, richer'

Trade too

You should get a discord where you can run idea's by people and help getting inspiration on how a character would react to cerion's actions like for instance him saving a stark and what would tywin do in response you could ask the discord what they think he would do

education and when their educated doesn't change their mental development, and even then consider who tywin is a deeply pragmatistic man who many claim to have little to no feelings getting him to change his mind on anything or listen to anyone whom he doesn't respect which after the kidnapping incident cerion is apart of that category and even before that, during the rebellion he was like 4 so right now like what I said earlier cerion can't really change anything major or convince tywin to change plans and or someone tywin sees no profit in helping

I honestly prefer how it's developing now with him being less than 12 any serious conversation with tywin would get shot down in flames, my personal favorite GoT fan fics are where they have a massive timeskip from the prologue and in the chap before the timeskip they explain his viewpoint on how he's grown over the 14-16 years and family members and major characters views on him.

It was a comment I saw in a no no manhwa

If older tendencies are still upheld in entesia's neighbors and associated countries then why in his right mind did the president make a woman a head of foreign affairs I don't mean that in the sexist sense I mean it in the sense of she's a head of diplomacy that being so It would be immensely better for foreign relations if the head of foreign affairs was non insulting the thinking here in her appointment is illogical and downright stupid

could of done the ol "Origin Redacted" trick china's and it's bio weapons development department are big fans of that

I think it was alright not really impactful though

Fourteen year old's don't talk like her they're moody, arrogant, and annoying to he** and back.

Was thinking about reading this but any kind of r*** support or justification even non-intentional or even if the b**** deserved it is unacceptable to me it ain't that hard to torture some one non-s**ually. so even better just move on like a real relationship, an eye for an eye will only make the world blind

Man can turn a lesbian straight

Congrats on 500k views, in 16 chapters that's pretty impressive