I really would like you to continue writing this story but if you find it uncomfortable to continue I would recommend that you do another one and then when you are more confident and have more experience you rewrite this story (like all my comments, use a translator)

I thank you for having listened to my advice after all it is your story and I have no right to tell you anything about it but I appreciate that you considered it

don't worry your story is going pretty well leaving aside the fact I already mentioned and I hope you continue to make the story as you prefer to make it

I like the story but you focus too much on writing about the characters it takes a template from which makes it just a bit of story and the rest just information from a template character

my condolences for your sister take all the time you want

actually in the description it said that the original story is found with the same name in the search engine

Good

I would like you to continue

Exp

Exp

Tienes hasta el momento un buen desarrollo de la trama y los personajes ....….…………….....................,.,.,,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,..,,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,,.,..,,..,.,,.,.,.,..,.,........,.........,,,.....

I excited for another chapter

Ino