Emery sat on his bed as he gazed through the window. If he looked above, thousands of stars covered the canvass of the night sky, wishing to himself that his father was one of the stars. If he looked below, the clouds below were rich. He lay on his head on the pillow that was softer than anything he had ever lay his head on.
The writing is really repetitive and it makes it a bit awkward at some time. So can already see a character development and I can clearly see that the Author is trying to make a complex world development. Good so far but could be better
Great story so far, good development, but your sypnosis could be better however. You give a real personality to your characters and that is my favourite aspect
So far there is just one problem, you did not give the power levels of the gods. I would really like to know who is the most powerful god out of all of them
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This is a really good story, however, given how hard and complex the story already is, it might be hard to develop the story correctly. I hope the next chapters will not be bad because of that
I love this story alot. My favorite character is Breta because she reminds me a lot of my little sister who is funny and sometimes careless.
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I really love the play style as well as the plot of the story. The way things are going, I bet this novel with become one of the best if you try to improve your writing skills