AsteRaven

Yes, I know. That's why I reported it. The last paragraphs of Chapter 5 had incorrect pronouns.

No, I reported the mistake on the server and the translator seems to have changed it now.

5 paragraphs ago this person was a "she"

I feel bad

Maybe adopted? Or not her son and instead her husband's son born out of wedlock?

The largest land creatures to ever exist on Earth weighed around 70-80 tonnes, that's only around 7-8 times heavier than modern-day African Elephants. Zunesha is unfathomably bigger and heavier than that.

They act completely OOC its not even remotely close to how they actually are.

It's good, grammar is better than most fics on this platform. Pacing is a bit fast but it's okay ig, considering this is just the start. I won't ask about the lore and explanation behind the Nation of Disorder, since it'll be an important plotline later, but I'm quite curious about it. Dialogue is the main issue imo. It's good enough but could be better. Feels unnatural some times. The flow gets broken. Daly and Anderson are interesting choices, love both of them so looking forward to it. Also, please don't rush the romance🥀🙏 All in all, good potential. (I'm the guy from the reddit post u made btw.)

Where tf did Nihility come from?