Nexluz

The synopsis was promising, but this is trash, like literal garbage, like “omg wtf why isn’t this in the dumpster”

I get what you mean but the story doesn’t read like that, it’s kinda feels like you switched from pov to narration focus to quickly end the story, I’m probably projecting other authors onto you, cause it’s a sign of the end in a fanfic

I mean I’ve reread the first ten chapters of this story and the first few chapters of the “new” one and it’s pretty obvious you’re taking things faster and more exposition/narration vs actual dialogue, idk I may be trippin

He didn’t mock anything, I don’t even think he spoke this chapter

Is the story ending here? This chapter feels even more rushed then the previous ones, you can end the story my dude, it’s okay. Maybe pick a few fandom like mass effect or Skyrim or any other setting if you’re getting bored of this story

It’s absolutely disgusting that you recommend ai

Yeah it’s definitely ai written

This feels like ai

Yeah I’m sure someone who’s never read fanfic would maybe enjoy this but the whole confused retarded mc at the begining is just too hard to read

How dumb is he? How much longer are you gonna spend on his confused arc