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TheMasterNovice1mthCommentedAlright. Calm down, Epstein Uchiha. 😵💫😖🤢🤮💀
Finally, he had a day off today and could chat with his future wife, Karin, and play games.- TheMasterNovice1mthReplied to Joc_Ular
That is fanfiction material.
This relatively unknown female ninja in the Naruto series, named 'Misaki,' is the first Jōnin willing to accept the "childbearing" mission so far! - TheMasterNovice1mthCommented
I doubt that, TBH. While civilians hire ninjas to do various jobs, there are still cheap and/or poor people that would be more than glad to use alternatives for explosive tags such as gunpowder. Gunpowder most likely exists, it's just that it's not that useful against ninjas.
But there is no gunpowder. - TheMasterNovice7mthCommentedCh 6 Ch.6: Legacy
- TheMasterNovice7mthReplied to DragoncloserCh 6 Ch.6: Legacy
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Writing Quality 4/5: There are minor grammar mistakes, but they are very miniscule.Story Development 4/5: Personally, until we reach the Draconic Ruins Realm, then I doubt that the path would diverge too much from TDG's plot.Character Design 4/5: Fairly intelligent. Too slow of a cultivation though. I also wished he was more cunning.Updating Stability 4/5: This is based on how your updates back then.World Background 4/5: I normally score TDG fanfics with 3/5-stars since they don't really delve into world-building. However, you added your own flare into this and it's decent.
- TheMasterNovice7mthReplied to MikeKungCh 2 God Ranking
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Tang San has no proper life experience as an adult in his previous life. All he knows is the Tang Sect. It's really annoying when people like the translator talk about Tang San's idiotic perspective without understanding how he developed his perspective; it just shows how hypocritic they are regarding that.
(T/N: Yeah right, the man's an adult in a child/teens body! And he is not 'experienced enough'?) - TheMasterNovice7mthCommented
What happened to the Profound Flame Demonic Tiger's Spirit Ring?
He currently only has his Left Arm and Right Leg Bone that has not fused with a Spirit Bone, and his Netherworld God Tiger Martial Spirit also has Two-Spirit Rings left before it reaches its peak. And he knows that those remaining Spirit Rings will come from 100,000 Year Spirit Beasts that will certainly leave behind 100,000 Year Spirit Bones, so why would he look at this 80,000 Year Spirit Bone when he has a better alternative? - TheMasterNovice7mthCommented
On average, the Blue Lightning Tyrant Dragon probably is the Mainland's Strongest Beast Spirit.
"I also want to see the power of the Mainland's Strongest Beast Spirit." Chen Feng smiled faintly. The Blue Lightning Tyrant Dragon was called the Mainland's Strongest Beast Spirit, though he was pretty sure that it is nothing before his Netherworld God Tiger. - TheMasterNovice7mthCommented
this epitomizes the: "intelligent mc"-tag
The reason he is auctioning Shi Nian's Spirit Bone is that Shui Yuan's Spirit Bone is of the Power System and is more adaptable and versatile, which is why he is going to keep Shui Yuan's, Spirit Bone. As for Shi Nian's Spirit Bone, it is only suitable for Auxiliary and Illusion System Spirit Masters, it does not have a greater effect as Shui Yuan's, therefore, he is going to auction it. - TheMasterNovice7mthCommented
it's fictional, get over it
(T/N:Lol, the cringe… has anyone here seen Bollywood movies where the male and female run into each others arms with their arms outstretched and flapping like dying birds? Yeah, that's exactly the image I had in my head when reading and translating this.) - TheMasterNovice7mthPosted
Writing Quality 4/5: It's decent. Stability of Updates 4/5: For when he was still active. Story Development 3/5: It's alright. Character Design 3/5: The MC is just alright. World Background: I don't why you have Japanese names in a universe where the universal language is Chinese. English names are fine as well since they appeared in the story, but Japanese names? Hell nah. You should've just stuck with the Chinese language.
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not really, no sane man would argue against a child's logic (especially if the logic isn't that stupid)
(A/N Like A TRUE BETA MC WHO SIMP'S FOR A LOLI WHILE HE'S 20) - TheMasterNovice7mthPosted
Writing Quality 4/5: There are a lot of text blocks. I hope separate the character dialogues and the extra information texts from each other. Stability of Updates 3/5: It's not as frequent, but the quality makes up for it. Story Development 5/5: Good so far. Character Design 4/5: Not so sure about the green hair, he's a decent MC overall. World Background 5/5: Soul Land's world background is well-fleshed out, especially since it has so many stories in it.
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Wasn't Sairorg sent to the clan's countryside?
The next was Sairaorg Bael, he was someone who Luciel respected in his last life, so befriending him would be goodC he doesn't need to worry about him in the training department, he and Sairaorg could become training partners. - TheMasterNovice7mthPosted
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Writing Quality 3/5: Constant grammatical errors. Stability of Updates 5/5: For when you were updating it. Story Development 3/5: He had a lot of chances to change things but didn't. Killing off the main perpetrators of the Sacred Family won't change much of anything, so I don't know why you even bother waiting for Nie Li. Character Design 3/5: He appears to have a clear goal in mind, but his decisions and ways of doing thing is rather strange. He's also not that interesting of a character. World Background 3/5: This is clearly an AU since the Dream Cloud World was sealed around the time of the Age of Darkness (more than a thousand years but not several or a few thousand like you've described). Not saying it's a bad idea, but it's not that interesting either.
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cannons don't exist in the ASOIAF?
The year is 293 A.C. The Greyjoy Rebellion is about to happen! This is my chance to convince my father, to let me help build up his kingdom. All I need to do is build the world's first cannon! Buwahahaha!