Dragonlord04
I have a very overactive imagination as I can think about several ideas and some details at once. The ideas I often think about are what ifs in Anime
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I was honestly confused. At first I thought it was a plan until the fact that Eri died in this AU chapter from your main story.
Seems he knows that something is amiss as he mostly likely saw her 'golden eyes'
And plus you need to provide some details in what goes on in the daily life of the MC themselves otherwise you'll confuse your readers if you rush to often like you did in your first two chapters. And it'll be a slow progress but it'll be better than before since you'll be to sway your audience much more than before depending on how much detail you instill into your rewritten chapters.
For female Vegeta, just fuse her with Female Broly and you get Brogeta or Vegoly.
Don't forget the Nasuverse considering the use of magic along with reality warping entities that could destroy and wipe out the entirety of reality as we know it. And the skills of the various servants that affect everyone around them depending on their rank in the skills themselves.
To be honest if you straight up said something like that in front of someone. Prepare for a whooping cause I said something very similar to that when I was little(4-6 years old) and I was chased around the house for several minutes while running away from my mother's 'chancla' and those things hurt when they land on you. Ah good times.
18, Launch, Female Vegeta, Female Broly, Kefla, and if possible a OC female Saiyan.
Shallot's bloodline since he managed to achieve super saiyan transformations in a short amount of time compared to Goku and Vegeta along with Gohan despite being as weak as a saibmen at the start of the Dragon Ball Legends game.
Toraka (Kakarot spelled backwards with the exception of the first K.)
Don't forget that he has potential even greater than of that of both Goku and Vegeta.
Better from what I read involving 'this' so far. Some barely had over a hundred words and the longest I've read took up a few chapters.
There you go.... You finally noticed. I'm proud, and well you stuffed your little friend in crazy so....yeah, at least she's a good yandere from what I've read so far.