MillyBooks

I swear. If I were an awakened in this novel, I would be unstoppable with how easy it is to actually defeat one.They all talk too much in combat for people who need to breathe to heal.Enemy starts bragging at me - first tier light magic, dark magic, or air magic to give their uvula a tickle."Behold, I am evil violet man the powerf-"

Evil villain rule number 458: If one of its natural bodily functions can hurt you by existing, this is where you leave and make a new plan.

He mind linked with her just a few sentences earlier.

Self update. I went and looked it up. Velagros is the guy who was tasked to escort Lith to the quarantine camp and was killed by the Talons. Even more confusing.

At least I think so. Later para says he is the oldest demon? That is definitely Locrias.

Velagros was that guy who died some chapters back that Lith spared from execution by the crown when he was a kid. Saw the questions below.

Thrud: "I'ma capture his family." -Sees three literal gods nuke everything related to threatening Lith's family.- Thrud: "I... am gonna come up with a better plan. Thank you, hapless dead strangers."

It seems like there could be a gem here, but explaining could be more necessary. I'm mostly unaware of what most the characters even look like besides red hair or a muscular man. I mostly find myself asking: "What is this? What does this person look like?" and things of the like. Sometimes explanations are needed - I'm only commenting on the free chapters, maybe the author has improved later, but I was asked to look at what was available. It feels more like: "Person goes here, does this," rather than a deeper characters without fleshing out. This is just my personal opinion.

The writing quality is much higher than most of the other things I scored it on, as writing First Person is a bit more difficult and it comes a bit disjointed here and there. Time seems to skip around a little too quickly, but that's personal taste. I know very little about the MC, she feels less established and more of a means to an end. I can tell she comes from an abusive family - but some scene and visuals might help a bit more. Things she looks to, something hinting at her financial status. Simply, I want to know more about the main character. It goes from abuse to training, to killing the abuser. What town is she from? Was she rich? Was she poor? When did her father start abusing her? Things of that nature.