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I am very impressed by the story so far. There is a lot of action, with some very well-written space battles (Those can be tricky). The writing style is fluid and very casual. I like the jump into action with no info-dumping. I would, however, like to see the world explored more in detail in the coming chapters! Good job!
Let me start off by saying that I love the title to this story! Overall, I find it incredibly well-written with vivid, yet bleak, descriptions and solid use of metaphor. There is not too much information given, which keeps you invested (Instead of info-dumping). And despite the whole apocalypse setting, the story is pretty self-contained. Well done!
I am thoroughly enjoying the story so far. The premise is intriguing. I'm generally not a fan of large info dumps in the first chapter (i.e. most of Zeta's backstory could have been revealed over the course of her dialogue with Anlo). Then again, that's just my personal philosophy. Otherwise, good job