Metal_Boxer

The flow of this story is quite good, even though there is a lot of repetition of words. Is it just me, but feels that the authors are preparing a big twist???

Another great story from the author. I hope you will get the contract soon and more peeps read this story, mate. You really deserve the recognitions.

In my opinion, the author is too focused on the feelings of the characters, so there are some parts that are not conveyed properly. An example is the world building. However, maybe Gaasuja really likes to write in that style and this is just my opinion. But, the plot is quite interesting.

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menurutku lebih baik ditambahkan lebih banyak action daripada dialog-dialog terus penulisan settingnya menurutku kurang jadinya agak sulit membayangkannya tapi ilustrasi-ilustrasi karakternya aku lumayan suka