Coyle
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I think this story can be something great, however, there is a big problem in this tale. The author puts too many unnecessary descriptions and info dumps. (Ex: Chapter 1) we don't need to know all of that right at the start. Also, the writing style isn't very appealing to me (maybe because it shows the emotions and motives of everyone, which seems great in theory but isn't at all. There is no mystery.) That being said, the story seems to be progressing rather well and I'm sure that with time, the 'problems' I pointed out in this review will change. Please continue with the great work, author!!
He is dumb
I'm not sure if mam is also correct tho
Btw the correct word is "Ma'am"
at this rate she will end like this:
Ahhh, thank you for the answer (:
What is a tiffin?
While the grammar and presentation have massive issues, this story shows potential. While the premise is nothing too original, with how much effort the author is putting on making new chapters, I wouldn't be surprised if this novel became famous. Continue with your hard work author! And if you can, please try to find a proofreader.