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he sowed chaos and committed mass extermination and earned rewards quite useful in case of death situations. but with all these bandits who did not feel fear, despair, anguish in short very negative emotions, and yet not a single grimm was attracted? I admit I don't understand, human habitations outside the four kingdoms of Remnant appear and disappear regularly when they don't have grimms as a major problem. 5
Great chapter! But I have a question, so far how many different genetic heritages are there coming from the primarchs and if there will also be the one belonging to the traitors. Where when they come out of the new world, will there be Space Marine Primaris in Blacksouls?
10 yay
8
9 because I understand the MC about the practice of "you cost death" or the fact that is sometimes (to be polite) too much harem... Kill the harem. And the gags
Will the new Happy be stronger than his canon monologue? Will he ever be able to transform like Carla into humanoid form?
He will have to be careful with the number of words that use it, especially the ones that are much more dangerous than this one. Or limit this use to the strongest monsters and the number of a horde
The chapter is quite long and in some interactions you should add the moment when the MC goes from one point to another when there is a time passing because otherwise it gives the impression that you are in a hurry. And there's also the fact that it's small, its grimoire... Really small, I wonder if he would be the only one who can read it or if he will be forced to buy a magic tool would only allow other person to read lol. But apart from that, it's a good and long introduction, I wonder how will be the next chapter
Wait, it's less than 2 years old chronologically speaking. He exterminated everyone, including his mother at 2 years old?
There's one thing that really bothers me is the pages that repeat themselves several times, especially at the beginning I feel like I'm going backwards and frankly it made me quickly check the whole thing to see how far it continues. I can't enjoy reading because of the extension that spoiled the pleasure of reading, no really I have to shorten it because it was simply aberrant, just with the first 5 pages the 6 gave me the impression of having entered a loop. Even in the original language there are more than 50 pages so half of the text is similar from beginning to end, even double by dint of reading in short it cut off my desire to read. You really need to fix the chapter because for the introduction like that in its current state. It hurts me just to see it, thank you for your understanding.
And of course probably better to do a slight AU to add, while you're at it there are a lot of ideas that could work
In fact, they're both 15 years old and to see it's been... Weird
Never underestimate the little princess, she could freeze you alive
A reincarnation in overlord? I admit that I don't see them often, and in the new world at that. Frankly, I wouldn't be surprised by the reaction of the Slane theocracy who will try to convince him to join their ranks. Or who checks their family background, probably thinking that is descended from a former player who would have been unknown to them until the tournament. Frankly for the moment I'd like to know how the MC lived before the first chapter, or see the reaction of all the countries that sent these spies. It's up to you to see the author