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DevouringStar5mthPostedI already read this fanfic until chapter 1000 or so. Overall it's a good story, the protagonist isn't a stupid person or anything like that. It's a shame that the MC ends up following Tang San and the story falls into the situation where the MC doesn't bring major changes to the story, but is there to shine in the highlights (Like the combat evaluation at the sherk academy). This goes until the spiritual masters tournament in which he does not participate with the sherk academy. Another annoying point is your system, which at a certain point was kind of "blocked" and wouldn't log in, but it was only when the MC went through a near-death event that the system decided to log in, saving the MC.
- DevouringStar5mthReplied to Ototsu_Yume
- DevouringStar2yrReplied to Orthanos
Yes
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Good to know
Of course, I took advantage of the moment and asked mine to teach me how to read and write, at first she denied it, but I convinced her otherwise by saying it was so I could tell stories to Tsunade, and she fit like a glove. - DevouringStar2yrReplied to ObamaUchiha
If you have more skill ideas comment on an author's note
Achieving a 20-day first-part advance by acquiring my new skill [Polyglotism], it allows me to have a basic understanding of every new language I know, as well as increasing the speed of learning it by 20%. - DevouringStar2yrReplied to ObamaUchiha
in that case the title is wrong?
Chapter 4: Time of born - DevouringStar2yrReplied to ObamaUchiha
yes, i will fix it, thanks
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Unless you are strong enough to deal with multiple heroes, your only option is to act in the dark.
'Wait! Becoming a villain is also a bad idea, who would want to live in a hole while all the heroes are after you?' - DevouringStar2yrReplied to Melon_Night
I think not. As dexterity improves your control over your body, 'control' improves your control over energy
Manipulation: 1 - DevouringStar2yrReplied to Melon_Night
I do not understand
"You are right, but you must promise me that you will only study for two hours and nothing else," my mother looks at me with stern eyes and I can only nodded obediently. - DevouringStar2yrReplied to Reimoss
It would be chakra control in a nutshell. If you have a lot of points in this attribute it would be easier to learn jutsus with rasengan, but it's not limited to that
Manipulation: 1 - DevouringStar2yrReplied to Murdof
What is your opinion on this choice?
Now continuing with the list of clans, I choose to be born in the Yamanaka clan. I opted for this option over clan like Uchiha, Senju or even Uzumaki due to the following factors. - DevouringStar2yrReplied to Murdof
just realistic
In addition, a hero is not the best of ideas either, after all, living on good deeds is not my thing. - DevouringStar2yrReplied to ReNo
Hi, I hope you are enjoying the story. Also, feel comfortable submitting possible corrections, suggestions on how I can improve the story, and name of techniques/abilities/jutsus.
Manipulation: 1 - DevouringStar2yrReplied to jahmii
This is the same reference I used
As for the other options, I'm going to follow a different path to my appearance, first I'm going to replace my black hair with a light blonde, while I change my jet black eyes to a violet on the inside with a transition to a blue one near the edges, already with the skin, a clear tone...