Whats up with your mafia novel? 'our gonna drop it?

Mor?

P.S. Don't forget if someone has a bad comment on the story, they have to read it first, so something right you did.

Thanks for the reply. Maybe it was my mistake, but I still stand by the notebook thing and if you want to change some pre-established facts, edit past chapters for consistency.

The novel is great overall, but my only problem is the inconsistency in the facts presented. For instance, the occurrence of monster waves is supposed to happen every decade, with one granting a racial skill and the next a player skill. However, after the first wave, there's an 80-year time skip with only mention of the next wave, without any reference to the other seven waves that should have occurred, nor are there seven new skills in the MC panel. It's not just a typo between 'decade' and '80'; it's a significant inconsistency. Also, the civilization level in the panel shows as 0.3 when they were at the clan level, but years later, when they are tribes, the civilization level drops to 0.2. Despite these issues, the world-building and progression in the novel are excellent, and I highly recommend it. However, I urge the author (and this is for you) to create a facts and consistency notebook to refer to while writing each chapter and to edit past chapters if there are any changes made to maintain the quality of the work.

First, I'm not de MC, if I was, probably it would be more Broadway screenwriter style with debi as FL. Second, she is not he's wife, it's just a war romance, they hapen, then the love dies low, until they see each other again and the flame rekindled (after she's married). Third, if somthing like what you mention happens to me, a clean break up (of most of he's bones) is My response (I practice martial arts)

Technically, Even Apolonia marry Michael, it's not Ntr un less the MC loses her to him. Ntr would be if she has to choose between both, she stays with the other man

Speaking of continental (the car), he could Open the Continental hoteles from John wick, that would be great. And speaking of Apollonia, is she still gonna marry Michael (Don't know how You would do it)? 'cus that would be a great card for the MC play against him

Yeah but he can use them to grow his family and expand it to the level of Michaels

Great novel but chapters to shorts and inecesary introspectiva paragraphs

+ I liked the idea of a sword-cane for the MC and for that shot in he's leg makes him elegible for a Purple Heart one of the most prestigious medals a soldier could get.

After World War II, there was a period of about a decade during which society repudiated returning female soldiers, labeling them as violent and tomboys. To the extent that, in order to marry, they had to conceal their participation in the war, including any medals or rank, as it was believed they obtained these through "favors" to their superiors. These historical events could be used to create a special force comprised of women, such as female bodyguards for female public figures, guards in brothels, or even undercover agents, as during that time, little was expected from women.

Any idea how long?

*Romance

Any omance?

Everything okay? This is great, you can take a break if you want, just warn us and dont drop it, please~

Sorry for repeating the same thing but I still feel like batman talks to much, like the fist dialog, instead of that normal(profound but still normal) a simple literal "I agree" or "every rose has its thorns, we just have to pluck them" out of nowhere leaving gordon startled and not initially comprehending what batman means, then after the subsequent (short) chat and with batman gone, gordon in the same position, gazing at the city finally comprehends what batman meant at the beginning. Somthing like that, he dosen't give answers directly unless its necessary, usually talks without context and in metaphors or something, leaving you to put it al together

Whats the R18 tag for, is there romance, harem?

Technically there are 3 jokers in the original time line, dont know the specifics but I think the original one is the redhood one that fall into the poll of chemical in a fight with batman and is the one that kills robin(tod), reason why after being revived in the Lazarus pit, robin changes his nikname to Redhood in spite of the joker

Tfc keep the good work