Astro_young

Hello friend, I actually thought about it, but 200 years before his birth is too long and a lot of time skip, I would make the story very long like that of a xianxia, 200 years before the anime frieren, it seems reasonable to me, with the ideas I have for himmel and Aurelion.

Aquí el autor intentaré hacer la historia lo más interesante posible, es mi primer fic.

I feel that you are taking Frey down a strange path, these last chapters although interesting, I am still worried about the issue of "influencing" with the new system, a cold Frey in search of motivation, I understand that Abram's thing there changed the perspective but you will not turn him into a hero that is not his role in the world, he should stay as an Anti-hero or villain at best, pushing Snow to be stronger, he can save Sansa I don't see anything wrong, being friends with Danzo and Ragna, that Seris falls in love Of him or something like that, instead of the system, evolves his abilities, that the perception of Alcon's eye becomes a kind of "Haki" of observation, his martial art that at first was felt, now it is no more than 2 or 3 attacks, you have so much to explore, Ada, The librarian of the moonligth, the world outside the temple, that the abyss that Abram saw is a seed of the nameless lord and that's why the engineer takes care of him so much, you have many themes, the background that is in this story I love it, I hope you can know how to use it very Well, I leave this comment for Sansa's comment "Your darkness is weak" let's base on the fact that Frey has SSS aura, Abram saw an "abyss" inside Frey, so if we leave it as an arrogant comment it would be fine but he gave a beating to characters who in full power in their current strength top the S- rank and Sansa gave them a "Plaze", It makes the system useless, in the end it's just a tool for Frey given by the engineer, don't make a romantic comedy such a beautiful novel, simply discard the system or give Frey missions out of the temple, more now that He is under the supervision of Phoenix, it includes civil wars, small disputes in which the starlight family is involved, things like that, give him where to direct his sword without making him look weak Nor so strong, give him more tragedy that he feels pressure, in the end it is his role, it is not time to rest or romance, the war is coming, prepare him, pulse him, fill him with blood and victory, defeats, tears, make him lose him close people so that he grows, becomes stronger, give him a non-heroic reason to make him stronger. I'm sorry, I got excited haha, it's just my point of view. 😭

I feel that you are taking Frey down a strange path, these last chapters although interesting, I am still worried about the issue of "influencing" with the new system, a cold Frey in search of motivation, I understand that Abram's thing there changed the perspective but you will not turn him into a hero that is not his role in the world, he should stay as an Anti-hero or villain at best, pushing Snow to be stronger, he can save Sansa I don't see anything wrong, being friends with Danzo and Ragna, that Seris falls in love Of him or something like that, instead of the system, evolves his abilities, that the perception of Alcon's eye becomes a kind of "Haki" of observation, his martial art that at first was felt, now it is no more than 2 or 3 attacks, you have so much to explore, Ada, The librarian of the moonligth, the world outside the temple, that the abyss that Abram saw is a seed of the nameless lord and that's why the engineer takes care of him so much, you have many themes, the background that is in this story I love it, I hope you can know how to use it very Well, I leave this comment for Sansa's comment "Your darkness is weak" let's base on the fact that Frey has SSS aura, Abram saw an "abyss" inside Frey, so if we leave it as an arrogant comment it would be fine but he gave a beating to characters who in full power in their current strength top the S- rank and Sansa gave them a "Plaze", It makes the system useless, in the end it's just a tool for Frey given by the engineer, don't make a romantic comedy such a beautiful novel, simply discard the system or give Frey missions out of the temple, more now that He is under the supervision of Phoenix, it includes civil wars, small disputes in which the starlight family is involved, things like that, give him where to direct his sword without making him look weak Nor so strong, give him more tragedy that he feels pressure, in the end it is his role, it is not time to rest or romance, the war is coming, prepare him, pulse him, fill him with blood and victory, defeats, tears, make him lose him close people so that he grows, becomes stronger, give him a non-heroic reason to make him stronger. I'm sorry, I got excited haha, it's just my point of view. 😭

Es cine, leer esta novela es como beberse un buen vino, entre más lees y pasa el tiempo, más cautivado quedas, sus luchas, sus sentimientos, sus objetivos, cómo piensa, cómo actúa, se siente propio de él, no es ver a un personaje es ver a un ser sintiente plasmado en letras, desde el capítulo uno viviendo sus luchas día a día, viéndolo luchar, caer, desmoronarse y aún así se levanta y lucha por querer ver a su familia. Me encanta esta novela.

Hello, how are you?, it has been years since I first read this fic, and I must say that I do not get tired of Re reading it. Simply a work to enjoy again and again like wine, today 2023 finish reading it again and let me say thank you, thank you for doing this work as far as you could. It is one of the best works that and read, unfortunately it was not officially completed as it should be but thank you thank you and thank you very much.

Brother you have a pretty good concept, do not leave this lying and try to be more recurrent with the chapters so hooked and one does not forget this work. [img=update]

You need an urgent partner, and the hand does not quiet you

And here 1 year later, it just leaves a bad reading taste and you would get lost with the Pov

Thanks for the chapter, a hug 🤗