htwin

Tear not year….repeated mistake in chapter. Also….her tear more likely not in eyebrow that’s ABOVE the eyes. Maybe you meant eyelashes? Still that would be some strong eyelashes for the weight of tear would make them fall.

I see, alpha set it up for his own downfall.

Why not mindlink to confirm with Alpha?

Ha. If you wait for someone to recover from PTSD you will be there your whole life. Anything can trigger it, smell, sight, sometimes taste.

Trousers?

This is prime example of just reread what you wrote to see if it makes sense. I have no idea what your trying to say. Also it’s sit. Seat is was you sit on.

I really wish author would reread what they wrote, not what they wanted to write. There is so many small issues that could be easily fixed. I keep complaining, I know. I should stop reading it. I like the idea of the story but get so frustrated reading it. It’s like trying to read a story written by a kid that does not know how to spell and does not keep their thoughts straight.

It’s so inconsistent. Flash back of father dead said she had brother, but aunt and cousin all she had left. Pretty sure she is suppose to have brother, cousin, aunt… but who knows

Past and future in one sentence…

If you do as this describes it goes from screaming to ahhhh like at drs office. This changes the feel for me. I would just take the pulling tongue forwards out.