StoryTellingGhost
A passionate writer of Anime games, Movies and Fan-fiction. Started my very own story called: Dan Walker: Outbreak
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If you understand Russian perfectly, keep it to yourself. All you've written until now is negative, this is not a place for you and others to rant and pin-point every bad part of my Story. Regards, Author.
Thanks for bombarding my feed. If you don't like the Story, don't rant here about it. If something is bothering you and need to say it, go tell someone else about it.
First-Person Narration is always welcome in my Book(Pun intended). Captivated from the get-go! Grammar is on point, what caught my eye was that the Chapters published were posted just a few hours ago. World Background is lacking for me and the Story development feels a little off at times, probably just me being a relaxed reader. I recommend it, definitively a good read!
Starting from the bottom of your Review, that is the point. When someone spends their Life alone for quiet some time, they become emotionless and less suprised when something happens. Not everything in Life is pink and filled with Rainbows. It is a Outbreak of a Virus, people shouldn't be happy about it. In my eyes, I let the reader in the unknown so there is some Mystery mixed in I wrote the Novel in English, not translated to English. It is funny to me how you claim that the whole Novel is badly writte. If you would've atleast peeked at the other reviews, they stated clearly that the later Chapters have improved Grammar. Shame how you assume the entire Novel is bad, just based on poor Grammar in the first few Chapters. Thank you for the review regardless. Even if it put my entire Novel in a bad light because of beginner mistakes that, in your opinion, stretches all the way into the End.
It was meant that way. My intention was to create a world which is in some ways very different from the real World. The Main Character has a very harsh backstory, which leads to the lack of surprise on his end. Being alone for a number of years, in rare cases means you lose some, if not all emotions. Thus, for myself and some readers, it makes sense. So I would assume.
Already know and corrected that. Appreciate it anyway.
First off, the first few chapters are very short for me. Barely anything to grasp, but I assume it will get much better later on. Writing Quality - for a non-native English speaker, well written. Story development - dropped into the action, not much to go of off, but it gets better later on. Do still prefer to know where I find myself, but it is fine. Character Design- mysterious and short, quite a downside for me. Not much to say here, hopefully getting better later on. World Background - again, no idea where I am. Not a major downside, but confusing for me. Overall, a good and interesting read. Recommend it!
The Writing caught my Eye immediately, a fine and sarcastic Mc. Slowly but surely you find yourself immersed in the story by the first few paragraphs. Captivating and carefully worded, nicely done. Story development, steady as she goes. Going into the at a constant pace is a very good choice. Character Design, this is very the story shines for me. The Mc is described, for me, as a rather special individual. Someone you usually don't meat in real life, or rather... not too many exist of them. Overall a captivating and nicely written story, a highly recommended read for anyone who hesitates.
I am not to keen to join any contest at the moment. Maybe in the future. Thank you anyways for suggesting.