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StoryTellingGhost

StoryTellingGhost

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A passionate writer of Anime games, Movies and Fan-fiction. Started my very own story called: Dan Walker: Outbreak

2020-12-05 JoinedGlobal
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  • StoryTellingGhost
    StoryTellingGhost2yr
    Replied to Nickjr321

    Glad to see you like it.

    Ch 10 Chapter 8: Surprise Vacation
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    Dan Walker : Outbreak
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    StoryTellingGhost3yr
    Replied to TaintedMetal

    If you understand Russian perfectly, keep it to yourself. All you've written until now is negative, this is not a place for you and others to rant and pin-point every bad part of my Story. Regards, Author.

    "Sergey, grab' i peregruppirovyvaysya na menya.(Sergey,loot and regroup on me.)" you order him.
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    Dan Walker : Outbreak
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    StoryTellingGhost3yr
    Replied to TaintedMetal

    Thanks for bombarding my feed. If you don't like the Story, don't rant here about it. If something is bothering you and need to say it, go tell someone else about it.

    The two Fox Girls are looking terrified at the man,which leaped out a window and saved they'r life's.
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    Dan Walker : Outbreak
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  • StoryTellingGhost
    StoryTellingGhost3yr
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    Full Rating! My cup of Coffee. Yep, I don't really drink Tea too often now. Captivated just from looking at the Cover. Everything is great! Writting, Action-packed and very nice Story Telling. Adding it to my Collection! Not one Chapter will remain unread! Recommend it, very awesome read!

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    City of Vengeance
    Action · Easy_Tiger
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    StoryTellingGhost3yr
    Replied to Easy_Tiger

    Thank you very much for the kind words, taking your time to write this review and reading my Story.

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    StoryTellingGhost3yr
    Replied to At_Melkert

    Good to hear! Keep it up!

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    Smells Like Heaven
    Fantasy · IamLolicon
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  • StoryTellingGhost
    StoryTellingGhost3yr
    Posted

    Grammar and Storytelling and everything else, get better as the novel progresses. Stay Tuned! Just reviewing my own Story, nothing shameless.

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    Dan Walker : Outbreak
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  • StoryTellingGhost
    StoryTellingGhost3yr
    Posted

    First-Person Narration is always welcome in my Book(Pun intended). Captivated from the get-go! Grammar is on point, what caught my eye was that the Chapters published were posted just a few hours ago. World Background is lacking for me and the Story development feels a little off at times, probably just me being a relaxed reader. I recommend it, definitively a good read!

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    Smells Like Heaven
    Fantasy · IamLolicon
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    StoryTellingGhost3yr
    Posted

    Captivating writing and narration. Light to read and easy to digest. An interesting and rather spooky Cover. Not much to complain about, I would recommend it.

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    The Chronicles of the Deadly Dead
    Fantasy · David Neilsen
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  • StoryTellingGhost
    StoryTellingGhost3yr
    Replied to IamLolicon

    Appreciate the Review. The Grammar is fixed in the later Chapters. I wanted to leave the Mistakes I made in the beginning as a reminder of improvement. Setting a starting point of my Journey as an Author.

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    Dan Walker : Outbreak
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    StoryTellingGhost3yr
    Replied to David_Neilsen

    Starting from the bottom of your Review, that is the point. When someone spends their Life alone for quiet some time, they become emotionless and less suprised when something happens. Not everything in Life is pink and filled with Rainbows. It is a Outbreak of a Virus, people shouldn't be happy about it. In my eyes, I let the reader in the unknown so there is some Mystery mixed in I wrote the Novel in English, not translated to English. It is funny to me how you claim that the whole Novel is badly writte. If you would've atleast peeked at the other reviews, they stated clearly that the later Chapters have improved Grammar. Shame how you assume the entire Novel is bad, just based on poor Grammar in the first few Chapters. Thank you for the review regardless. Even if it put my entire Novel in a bad light because of beginner mistakes that, in your opinion, stretches all the way into the End.

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    Dan Walker : Outbreak
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    StoryTellingGhost3yr
    Replied to David_Neilsen

    It was meant that way. My intention was to create a world which is in some ways very different from the real World. The Main Character has a very harsh backstory, which leads to the lack of surprise on his end. Being alone for a number of years, in rare cases means you lose some, if not all emotions. Thus, for myself and some readers, it makes sense. So I would assume.

    Ch 1 Prologue
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    StoryTellingGhost3yr
    Replied to David_Neilsen

    Already know and corrected that. Appreciate it anyway.

    Looking out the window,the weather is getting darker as if its Winter,but it is Autumn.
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    Dan Walker : Outbreak
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  • StoryTellingGhost
    StoryTellingGhost3yr
    Posted

    First off, the first few chapters are very short for me. Barely anything to grasp, but I assume it will get much better later on. Writing Quality - for a non-native English speaker, well written. Story development - dropped into the action, not much to go of off, but it gets better later on. Do still prefer to know where I find myself, but it is fine. Character Design- mysterious and short, quite a downside for me. Not much to say here, hopefully getting better later on. World Background - again, no idea where I am. Not a major downside, but confusing for me. Overall, a good and interesting read. Recommend it!

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    汉语12
    Fantasy · Kronos661
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    StoryTellingGhost3yr
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    The Writing caught my Eye immediately, a fine and sarcastic Mc. Slowly but surely you find yourself immersed in the story by the first few paragraphs. Captivating and carefully worded, nicely done. Story development, steady as she goes. Going into the at a constant pace is a very good choice. Character Design, this is very the story shines for me. The Mc is described, for me, as a rather special individual. Someone you usually don't meat in real life, or rather... not too many exist of them. Overall a captivating and nicely written story, a highly recommended read for anyone who hesitates.

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    Conceited Dragon
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    StoryTellingGhost3yr
    Replied to Kronos661

    I completely agree.

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    Dan Walker : Outbreak
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    StoryTellingGhost3yr
    Replied to Kronos661

    Certainly will review yours, rest assured. Thank you for the kind words and honesty.

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    StoryTellingGhost3yr
    Replied to Limpin_Technocat

    I haven't forgotten, don't worry.

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    StoryTellingGhost3yr
    Replied to Limpin_Technocat

    Yes,my writing lacked when I first started. in my honest and unbiased opinion, it improved drastically as the Story progressed.

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    StoryTellingGhost3yr
    Replied to Mel_Aniv

    I am not to keen to join any contest at the moment. Maybe in the future. Thank you anyways for suggesting.

    Prologue
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