spq06s

I even made them overrepresented. Just sometimes there were moments when the tag harem suddenly appeared.

A beautiful story. The only problem I see is Felicia. She's too repetitive character. Almost every story. And God forbid this story will be harem.

The idea is interesting and smoim knowledge of English I do not notice any significant problems. Perhaps the only problem in this story will be the relationship of my father-son. Where the main problem is that the son hates his father because he did not pay attention to him and because of this he is a bad father. From the adult person it is difficult to read, but if take a point of view teen, then everything is clear. But at least it's early to decide something.

A great choice for a love interest! A very good character who is pushed aside by many

The protagonist seemed so insignificant in the eyes of Davy that he even shared his strength...

It was good, until the moment when Hermione was again made a super genius.

Everything was just fine...up to this point.

18 very young at the time of the first meeting. Since she called 24 year old Krillin an old man. In addition, she is forever young and will never grow old, well, she does not have “moonrise” either.

What about Broly? Maybe his, too, to Earth?

As I already said. Piccolo's separation was an unavoidable process, as in the anime, when he merged with Kami, their powers simply added up.