the story has a good start and mystery points. the world building could be improved but much better for a new writer

See this! I just gifted the story: Balloon

"Oh that lily where was she touching you? Nothing special she was just touching my lips with hers" You should add this line in your synopsis. I really laughed reading the chapters. The characters are sweet and funny. I enjoyed reading it after all the dramas. Most important thing is writer has started working only a month ago, yet all her books have a different flavour of life. Clap for you.